Lucid Dreaming.

Lucid Dreaming.

A Poem by Spacecadet
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Thoughts to paper.

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As you're fast asleep,
I'm wide awake in this arctic chill
That's invaded my heart.
The sound of the ocean
Calms my aching heartbeat
And as the waves kiss the shore
They sweep away the footprints
We left scattered on the sand
All those tears ago.

© 2014 Spacecadet


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Spacecadet
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did you experienced it yourself? did you went through sleep paralysys?

Posted 10 Years Ago


Spacecadet

10 Years Ago

Sleep paralysis is actually different from lucid dreaming, but no I have not experienced it.
isus

10 Years Ago

i know, there is some techniques to get in lucid dream through sleep paralysis
This was nice. I found a lot of parallels and metaphor in this piece. What I took from this is that time heals, but it's not easy. Loved it and can relate. Will be back for more.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Spacecadet

10 Years Ago

Thanks G! Appreciate it :)
All those tears ago...stands out for me

Posted 10 Years Ago


Spacecadet

10 Years Ago

Thank you, that's my favorite line as well :)
Very lucid work.
Cools the heart like the splashing waves on the body.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Spacecadet

10 Years Ago

Thankyou..
zainul

10 Years Ago

You are most welcome.:)
It's a good thing the best "you" was on the beach when the chill arrived...

Posted 10 Years Ago


Spacecadet

10 Years Ago

The beauty of beach sunsets set the chill aflame :)
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ron
Past love. How bitter the taste of love.
Great poem, love it...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Spacecadet

10 Years Ago

Much appreciated Ron!
ron

10 Years Ago

You are most welcome Spacecadet.
Endings and letting go... finally.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Spacecadet

10 Years Ago

Never soon enough..
Thanks for reading!
I loved this piece but this piece could be more cool reading if you'd gripped some more rhyme. Yeah, I know here in this piece, you've tried to hold a rhyme and you did a great job here, So, here's a rhythmic version of your this poem ...

"As you're fast asleep, I'm wide awake in this arctic chill,
The sounds of my aching heartbeat, Waves kiss my angelic imprints,
We left some scattered on the sand years ago ...
Which's still making my beautiful blue eyes, "Wink...Blink!"

That's a poem, I've made with a rhyme and yup, i've gifted you as well. I hope you love this poem. Am not here to show off anything, me too here to learn from others and i've read your profile where I found you too want criticisms as I do want. So, i'd love if we both read each others stuffs and put our personal thoughts on a review box, cause it'd help us allot improving our skills.

Thanks for reading. I really love your poem the way I loved mine.
Keep up the great work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Spacecadet

10 Years Ago

It's a prose poem and so there is no rhyme scheme. It isn't meant to rhyme, the flow is such that th.. read more
Tena Luvs

10 Years Ago

I like your poem the way it is. I totally can relate to it for I am a Lucid dreamer myself. And this.. read more
Nice twist ! Vigorating imagery, emphasised by your dance of opposites. Well done. Short and sweet.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Spacecadet

10 Years Ago

Sorry for the late response! Thank you for your kind words as always :)
Very interesting, I see the waves sweeping away the footprints as the person finding the strength to move on after a heartbreak… a short poem with powerful imagery

Posted 10 Years Ago


Spacecadet

10 Years Ago

I'm sorry for the late response. Thank you for reading and your perception is spot on :) Glad you li.. read more

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Added on March 12, 2014
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Tags: Dreams, Elusive, Sand, Footprints, Ache, Heartbeat, Prose Poem

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I'm a student, moody writer and keen discoverer of soulful writing. Everything I write is right from my heart. Being a hopeless romantic, my favorite genre to read and write is romance. Heartbreak mak.. more..

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