Promises in the dark

Make 'em to break 'em.

                                                            Promises in the Dark

You say being half a world away won't ever change how you feel. You slide the promise over my finger before you leave

I say I love you

You say it's time to fly, you're going to live your dream

I say I love you

You say you'll come back to me, I am your home

I say I love you

You say you're tired, you can't call tonight

I say I love you

You say there's no escape, this new world is engulfing you whole

I say I love you

You say there isn't enough time, all that's left of us is fights

I say I love you

You say I don't understand you and you're running out of patience

I say I love you

You say "This  is it" as white noise invades my mind

I say, I will always love you

Author's Note

Excuse how the repetition sounds, its to enforce a point. I hope it reaches out to you because it's from the innermost parts of me :)

Reviews

[Jackson H. Harley]

Great poem with powerful emotion, the repetition adding the extra emphasis that makes this write perfect :)

[Spacecadet]

Thanks so much Jackson :)

[Jack...]

This is so sad and so very real. I have been down this path before and it never seems to end at the garden. Very nicely penned.

[Spacecadet]

Thank you Jack, I'm glad you liked it. And yes, it's not all rainbows and butterflies. Far from!

[Madalyn Beck]

I think the repetition works well! You did a great job conveying a relationship here, one, I feel, I have been in before! Great write! :)

[Spacecadet]

It's never pretty is it?
Thanks for stopping by :)

[Wabbajack]

Wow, a very well done poem about relationships and the (seemingly) end thereof. The repetition is actually perfect, and is part of what makes it so good. I must throw a like at you for this.

[Spacecadet]

Thank you for your kind comets Wabbajack! :)

[Spacecadet]

*comments! Autocorrect is a pain.

[Wabbajack]

You're welcome

[Jewel Veal]

the repetition works! you throughly get your point across. it helps create imagery for the reader to put themselves in the situation!

[Spacecadet]

Thank you for the review!

[Joshua Snyder]

I take it your not together anymore.

[Spacecadet]

Everything I wanted to make public has been made public :)

[emmajoy]

'.. .. as white noise invades my mind ~ I say, I will always love you'

Ohhh that last line.. tis heartbreaking! What a superb piece of writing, even though it's so obviously breaking your heart to think and write it. Plus, the repeated line just pushes the blade that little deeper each time you use it. Don't know what else to write. Is tragically beautiful writing.

[Spacecadet]

Translating feelings to words has actually always made me feel a lot better, its my favorite outlet. And it's just that much better when it's appreciated and liked by others! Thank you so much for such an encouraging review! :D

[Shaquana Adams]

I really felt the emotion here. The repetition can go both ways, but there may be a way to tweak it to make it read better. Very nicely penned! :)

[Spacecadet]

Please do let me know if you can think of a better way, because I did and this truly was the only way to put that level of emotion into words. I'm really glad you like it though, thanks for stopping by! :)