All I Need

A poem

The grass is billowing by the steed. The night is so very clear. all I really, really need. is to know that you are there. The moon is shining brilliantly white. the stars are twinkling everywhere. so why am I crying on this beautiful night? I am crying because you are not there.

Reviews

[Morrigan Nicole]

A simple poem with the rhyme scheme of abab cbcb Used to its fullest. I love the way that you used such perfect imagery to convey your feelings of loneliness and want. Often times, when writing such as this is read by the auditor, we can relate very well to it, to the feeling of desire for the other, and this type of relatable literature makes it all that much enjoyable to read. We can have a deeper understanding and connection with it. I think you have done a great job on this one. I personally have gone through this on my own! I understand how the lonely feeling can make even the best of nights depressing. Maybe due to the fact that the night is so beautiful and you long to Share the feeling of bliss, ease and happiness with another human being, but inside you know too well that such can never happen, so the beauty is destroyed, and all the speaker can find in it, is tears.

Overall, I would rate this easily at a hundred.

[The Wave]

Thanks alot for the detailed review:)

[Morrigan Nicole]

Anytime!

[Forever Hidden]

Sounds like me. I miss someone A LOT everyday and I try not to tear up but it just happens sometimes. Very emotional poem. I know exactly how you feel. Good write

[The Wave]

Thank you also. I appreciate it:)

[Forever Hidden]

Your welcome.

[afra]

sad but beautiful write ....i loved it ...well done

[The Wave]

Thanks Afra:)

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Your sorrow...written so lovely :)

[The Wave]

Thanks a lot:)

[That1Nerd23]

Awe, this is sweet. Very nicely written, very descriptive and emotion-filled. Great job! (:

[The Wave]

Why thank you very much!

[That1Nerd23]

You're very welcome!