Non Fat, Zero Calorie Love

Inspired by a cobwebbed muse , A post by Chris titled Life and Serah's poem lessssssssss

NON FAT ZERO CALORIE LOVE

You were zero trans fat , no guilt

Low calorie , cholesterol free and less fat.

Just like the cardboard tasting popcorn 

that proclaimed to be delicious.

The chocolate that tasted like tree bark

And the tofu burger rolling on my tongue like a day old sponge.

All the hype of a well advertsed product

Falling short of it's claim.

In your absence, I ate a pint of Haagen Dazs

Smacked my lips with Godiva chocolate.

The sirloin tasted  so much better

Then turkey meat doused with fake gravy.

Thank you for being around just long enough

To show me the difference

Between false proclimations and the real deal.

I may have settled, if only for a moment.

To settle always means you're content with taking less than you aspire for.

Therefore, it must only be a temporary pause ..

Like sitting when you have to catch your breath

Before you embark on the next stride.

Running the  marathon of life

Is so much better without carrying your dead weight.

Reviews

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~ hahahahahahahahaha... damn... you shattered all the glass in my building and will wake up the neighbours because i'm laughing my guts out... :D ~ i'm so proud of myself (for partially triggering this piece)... it's so amazing with so much zest and zing... that i want to dig into a bucket of Haagen Dazs too... and i love these lines...

"Thank you for being around just long enough
To show me the difference"

~ and the rest of course... but especially the last two lines... oh, that image of dead weight is so perfect... but the first twelve lines are making me crack up really badly... hahahaha... this is the most powerful ode to black humour i've read in a long, long time... oh, how i love this piece... hahahahaha... ~ you're pure dynamite... damn... i just can't stop laughing... :P

[Southern Cross]

All because of you , of course and guess what ? I'm guilt free... so even if the High Brows of WC find it totally incoherent, we know the taste and zest of black humour.

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~ awesome, awesome... guilt-free is way better than fat-free... you proved it so beautifully... ~ if the high brows of WC don't have a sense of humour, they're missing a treat... this poem of yours is as delicious as dark chocolate... but one needs to have black humour cells buzzing in one's brain to "get" it... :D

[marlayesterday]

I LOVE IT! :) so true so true Well said.

[Great Aunt Astri]

I am the one who is brain dead!!!!!!! Very probably because I have had experiences like yours! I thought this was a very clever write and it did not seem too 'black' to me ... just attuned to reality!

[Southern Cross]

Aww thank you so much for stopping to read and review my piece. I shall return the favor the moment I get home XO

[John Patrick Robbins AK..]

Very catchy write there my friend and a fast and fun read once is refreshing indeed.
keep posting sorry I haven't reviewed your work in awhile cause I really was missing out.
Cheers

Gonzo

[Southern Cross]

Nice to see your words of encouragement. I haven't written much in a while as my emotions are so bland... either it's that or I am totally brain dead

[John Patrick Robbins AKA Gonzo]

We all get in that rut so to speak and from what I have read of your work trust me you never have to worry bout being brain dead

[Southern Cross]

I needed the encouraging comment which gave way to a smile that is hard to come by these days..so that you Gonzo

[Chris]

Came by to wander the shadows...

[Southern Cross]

Thank you Chris..I have been in the shadows since my return from vacation. I write and toss rewrite and toss..my mind is in too many directions right now.

[Mia]

Lucky ones are those who have experienced something less than they deserve because they teach you so much and then you can move on and find what you do deserve! I enjoyed this!

[Southern Cross]

Do we truly move on or are we haunted by memories? I still don't know the answer. Thank you for the review. So good to hear from you again.

[Mia]

Maybe a bit of both...I don't know! Hopefully I won't be a stranger :)

[Samuel Dickens]

If care is not taken, most any of us can be dazzled and drawn in by that which is of no substance.

[Southern Cross]

Ah yes, but to remain there till the cobwebs form is the true disaster of it all. Thank you for stopping by.

[Knightingale]

I'm growing to like your poetry. So many pieces I've read on here that have felt like empty words (much like the person you spoke of here), it's refreshing to see something so emotionally charged it had to come from experience. I love this.

[Southern Cross]

I suppose I needed a boost of encouragement to kick start my writing once again. I am humbled by your review and thank you so much for reading my heart.

[Knightingale]

It truly is your heart I see here. Not just words. It was my pleasure entirely.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

That's the way to go! Splendid read and write. Perceptive and brilliantly woven for all to enjoy.

[Southern Cross]

So good to see you once agin. I do respect and appreciate your kind words.

[Night]

LOL! This poem is AWESOME! I really liked how you connected it all together.

[Southern Cross]

Thank you for stopping to read my words :)

[wolffman41]

great way to express yourself and love how you put it into these words. Very cleaver way to talk about false love and fake peeps..Love your writting!!! hugzzz tc xoxo

[Southern Cross]

Thank you for reading and as always I try to speak from my heart

[wolffman41]

Luv your writing.. miss you..tc xoxo

[Southern Cross]

Miss you too..promise to call when I actually have a free minute in my life.

[wolffman41]

ok worried about you...

[Southern Cross]

I have alot to tell you but will save it for the phone..Never meant to worry you :( You know how I am by now.

[wolffman41]

yes but still cant help myself.still missing u...