Hello

And this subliminal thread has reached a dead end.
Caught and warped through times tale it smiles insanity.
Where have you been?
The time has come to breach the surface and forget.
When your touch is my only breath.
It's time for me to exhale one last word.
And it's over as the wind carries me North
Never to be seen again;
But only on the coldest day will you catch that breath
That final word.
Goodbye.

Author's Note

I would like any kind of criticism, ideas, corrections, suggestions, compliments or anything else you can think of. After all that's why I'm here. Just please leave something - I appreciate any comment.

Reviews

[sivan]

This is a great poem, simple yet filled with emotion

[Personne]

This is very nice. I really love the last few lines. The only thing I think is odd is that you said, "been seen again;" Of course, I'm still young so maybe there is a rule of grammar I haven't learned yet. But I enjoy the poem overall(:

[J.P. Bristow]

Interesting read--to speak plainly I do not understand the intent behind the capitalization of "North" and "Breath" and the repetition of breath was lost on me-however the run-on sentence in line two very catchy and line 6 incredibly picturesque..I could see this read at a poetry slam.

[Demi Rose]

i am always going to read this and think of beauty and charm.