Naive

Love and truth are for the young

Both mirages that slip through clenched hands

Changing each day with what age has brung

Shimmering, disappearing over time's sands

Ever changing swirls of billowing smoke

Dissipate under a moment's disguise

Beauty is masked, wearing a floating ash cloak

Truth and lies, ghostly deceptions in a beholder's eyes

Reviews

[Grace Wolff]

Amazing! The fragile nature of love and the perception of the truth are things that writers never stop writing about and I love how you captured it. Great work!

[Soren]

Thank you so much for the read and for your comment of support it is most appreciated

[Betty Hermelee]

Dear Soren
When are young, love and truth shine, we tell all, whether upbeat or not....we have rosy cheek and mostly a rosy outlook on life
Yet as the tides turn and we age we get wrinkles, our skin turns rough...we get crabby because everything hurts...and we tend to conceal that which is close to our chest...we even lie a bit because we are vain and tend our minds tend to decay...young love is so innocent, but time does not allow it to remain
Warmly, B

[Soren]

Many of your points well taken are expressed in this poem. Yes we grow more cynical and cautious with age. Thanks for the review and comment Betty I am most appreciative

[Betty Hermelee]

My pleasure as always Soren
Warmly, B

[Vol]

Soren,
The greatest deceptions are almost always internal. Planted by something someone said, someone you like, respect, so you want to be like them and assimilate their attitude, their accent, the way they laugh, thier politics and even religion, and then say "It's who I am." I wonder how many live long enough to find the real self inside.
Vol

[Soren]

Thank you so much Vol for the read and comment and especially for the interpretation. So true in that all truth like art are in the eye of the beholder deceptions are internal indeed. I deeply appreciate your visit.

[Vol]

Why, thank you, sir!

[Sami Khalil]

I like the poem and the deep message
I would change brung to sprung; up to you. Not sure if it is correct. Check on that.
A powerful poem though.

[Soren]

Thank you so much for the read and comment they are most appreciated. Yes I deliberated about the inclusion of a nonexistent word improperly conjugated but left it because it emphasizes the illusion of truth of what should be a proper conjugation (brought) to the the vernacular of the uneducated and how we all are uneducated as to the truth that is an infinity or zero and not humanly comprehensible. Thank you for noticing

[Sami Khalil]

All true and well articulated. You are welcome Siren.
You might want to add new words to the English language like Shakespeare did. Thousands

[Efxaris Arampatzi]

I love this poem! It beautifully captures the fleeting nature of love and truth, weaving in stunning imagery of smoke and mirages. The reflective tone gives it a timeless quality, making the reader ponder the illusions we hold onto. Spectacular work!

[Soren]

Thank you so much for the read and most kind words of encouragement they are deeply valued.

[Pete]

life will strip away our innocence if we allow. excellent write with meaningful, capturing imagery.

reminds of what my muse thoreau wrote some time ago, “The question is not what you look at, but what you see." and

"Children, who play life, discern its true law and relations more clearly than men, who fail to live it worthily, but who think that they are wiser by experience, that is, by failure."

[Soren]

Indeed it does and the innocent dreams of youth become the cynical wisdom of age. Thanks so much for the read and words of support they are appreciated and valued

[Dylan Macadham]

Yes with age comes wisdom, which sadly is often synonymous with cynicism.
You've expressed it well!

[Soren]

Thank you from a cynic that ignores the bad and focuses on the good although his poems are dark.

[Dylan Macadham]

haha, you're a complex fellow! :)

[emmajoygreen]

Love it for too many reasons, Soren! Enough to add that - we row the same river on this cleverly and candidly put poem: word perfect!!!

[Soren]

Thank you so much Emmajoy for the read and the kind words that serve as support and encouragement they are most appreciated