Mist

A faded silhouette, canopy of trees through clouds

ghosts raising out of graves, buried long past

Images of dreams clothed in shrouds

dissolve and reemerge as if shifting sea foam vast  

Gray is the day, splotches of mottled green

Dim light peers through mist's parted sheets

Chamber music, in call of birds not seen

echoes 'or narrow trails, nature's cobblestone streets

Breaking sun's egg yolk, pours through gaps 

painting dark shade golden

running through rent cottony wraps

revealing life with bright liquid light molten

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Soren... a brilliantly penned poem,,, where Souls shine against a Canapy of tears gone by. gently, Pat

[Soren]

Thank you, Pat. Your words brighten my day and serve his great support. I thank you for your read and kindness.

[Martiya Daman]

This poem is a masterful portrayal of nature's mysterious beauty, interwoven with vivid imagery and a touch of ethereal wonder. The opening lines create an almost otherworldly ambiance, where the interplay of shadows, memories, and nature feels ghostly yet enchanting. The use of metaphors like "shifting sea foam vast" and "sun's egg yolk" evokes a sense of movement and transformation, as though the world is alive and breathing in its quiet majesty. The juxtaposition of "dim light" and "bright liquid light molten" encapsulates the transition from obscurity to revelation, painting a scene that feels both intimate and grand. The poem invites readers to see nature through a lens of poetic reverence, where even the smallest details carry profound significance. It’s beautifully atmospheric and brimming with life. Keep up the good work, Soren!

[Soren]

I am most humbled by this review. The review itself is as poetic as the poem itself. I have few words to express the gratitude for such insightful vision. Hitting capsule lights the very feelings I had when I wrote it.

[MCS]

Many layers here and images that leaves one feeling chilled and yet demands one reaches the end. Enjoyed!

[Soren]

Thank you so much for the read and understanding words of comment

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

a very dense and complicated work. a lot of images fly past like a very weird dream, there is something unsettling. waking up you have no idea what it means but leaves a sickly feeling all morning. written in a very intelligent way, words are appear in unexpected ways that is sometimes jarring. it has left me with an uneasy feeling the way clever horror stories do.

[Soren]

Deep thanks my friend for your careful review and comments. I wrote this as I stood on my deck looking to the tree covered mountains around me covered in misty fog through which I could hear the birds. It was rather haunting.