Dance

A breath taken, one more tick of the clock

Hangman awaken, one stands at the dock

A spider hung on a strand of steel

Heaven swung on a clapper's peal

From a flask of life a short swig

Old loves ask to dance the Tyburn jig

Author's Note

The Tyburn jig is the act of being hanged when the leg muscles spasm and convulse

Reviews

[Marie]

A poem from life's other side so finely inked in this metaphoric write, Soren. The imagery is a little on the dark side but that is necessary I feel in order to convey the extremely sad event of a hanging. Thank God, those sad days are gone, well... they are almost gone! Superb word choice together with visual detail combine to give chills to the reader as they read. The line "A breath taken, one more tick of the clock" alerts the reader to the serious event that is about to take place before their eyes. Sorry, the comment went before I was ready, Soren. The depiction is simply superb! Sublime inking, dear friend. Thank you for sharing...

[Soren]

Again, I thank you, Marie for your close reading of this poem. Yes, it is a bit dark, but that’s the feeling I had at the time I wrote it. Your comments are cherished.

[Marie]

Thank you for your kind words always. Bless you dear Soren... Enjoy a very lovely weekend, dear friend...

[Jeyanthi]

This is a full of rhyme...
I googled..
like spider hanging on the web .
Dancing to the beat of bell. Or prey hanging on the web, hanged... the jello not worked while Spiderman on the bell and she fell...

I just see, we are truly puppets!!..

[Soren]

Thanks so much for the read and comment it is appreciated.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

vivid expression of an old type of execution...
made my neck ache.
j.

[Soren]

Thanks Jacob life is short might as well dance

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

i was wondering what a Tyburn jig was lol.
that's pretty dark. the rhythm of the poem also has a heavy dullness, the syntax forces the reader to slow down between words. suitable to the gallows.

[Soren]

Thank you Ern you have struck the meaning and since we are on life's gallows so to speak we might as well dance.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

have you ever read Murakami's Dance Dance Dance? it's not his best work, but has that philosophy. life will throw random s**t at you, you just gotta step to the beat.

[Soren]

No I haven't will have to look it up