Night's soliloquy

Oh sweet night with your promise of slumber

bringing dreams of past child wonder

Let life's blazing sun nestle in his cloud covered bed

pulling over head, blankets of umber

Should dew drop tears reflect your fears

be quieted by night's mist covered lullaby

Sleep deep, from dream's Elysian fields reap

conscience's cornucopia supply

From the grave of night should dawn be reborn on shores of a distant morn

will new days cutting rays sting less than yesterday's thorn?

Will chains past be off cast, freed from memories forlorn

or like Oedipus, gouge out eyes under distant skies, despising the day born?

Reviews

[Sk. Kamarul Islam]

'From the grave of night should dawn be reborn...' the night is sweet and of course we are optimistic.

[Soren]

Thank you so much for your review and comment it is valued

[Dave W.]

Just fantastic, the line "Sleep deep, from dream's Elysian fields reap, conscience's cornucopia supply" just rolls of the tongue nicely. Great poem for this night I think. Soren I hope you have a great day.

[Soren]

Thanks so much Dave for your most generous and kind review of this piece it is deeply valued.

[Dave W.]

Of course Soren I think your are a good poet

[Marie]

This poem superbly details what life is like for a child at nighttime going to bed as the sun settles down to sleep in the sky. The dreams which come with sleep can cause fears with tears but also be soothed by the sweet silent song of night. Night's dreams are quickly forgotten as dawn appears and fears are put to sleep until evening time again. The chains of night which hold a child prisoner are cast off at morning's first light. What a great joy to be free, to run, to laugh, to play again and hopefully the new day will not give rise to a need to despise it. A lovely poetic address to the night very creatively captured in both word and imagery. I enjoyed reading very much and could identify some familiar lines in relation to sleep as a child. Lovely work! Thank you for sharing, Soren...

[Soren]

Thanks Marie again. Your review is so appreciated. Love your comment and its view.

[Marie]

Most welcome always, dear Soren...

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

your command of the English language is supreme. i enjoyed reading all your works, and i think i always will.

[Soren]

My friend you are too kind and your remarks humble me. They are most graciously recieved and cherrished

[Tumi]

This poem mixes calm imagery with deep thoughts, inviting readers to think about dreams and time. A few small changes could make it even better. Nice job!

[Soren]

Thank you for your read and comment. Yes I noticed one small error and corrected it. Writting a poem a day these are single draft efforts so I am sure you are correct that with pruning and reshaping a far better product would emerge