Steps

All the years you looked down the road and watched the steps that I strode

You could see much farther than me upcoming joys and tragedy

on your back a heavy sack of the provisions that would bring us back

but to carry me, you dropped the bag with the key

Now with a stranger I walk and occasionally talk

 the leaves are brown and the sun is going down

wandering in dim starlight I have no sight

so sore and stiff in the dark I see no cliff

If I should stumble and fall I will recall

how you lifted a spirit of lead, brushed off thunder of things said

blew away clouds of a rainy day handed me a pleasure bouquet

lifting the corners of my mouth from north to the south

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

Love how it comes together, great imagery, one step at a time.thank you for sharing.

[Arundass TP]

A beautiful poem, colorful and gentle. Keep it up 👍

[Marie]

What a very uplifting, heart-warming write penned with eternal gratitude in this very compelling poem, dear Soren. Situations have been reversed between the first and second stanza. In the first, a truly devoted soulmate has helped to carry the poet in times which were not good for him, to better times ahead. She had everything he needed and she dropped everything to be there for him. In the second verse, she has become a stranger whom he sometimes walks and speaks with. I feel it is the Autumn of their relationship, he is older now, muscles sore, eyesight dim and he wanders about in the evening light. The third stanza imparts to the reader the great joy the poet feels as he remembers how when his spirit within him seemed dark and heavy, that she carried him, made nothing of things which were said, blew away the clouds of doubt and made life a joy to live, changing his frown to a beautiful smile. Wow! Just stopped to take a breath! Totally wrapped up in this intriguing poem! Feelings are eloquently expressed, depiction is breathtaking, and the poem is superbly penned. Great use of allegory and other figures of speech. A very in depth write too! Thank you for sharing, dear Poet. Kudos well deserved!

[Soren]

You truly have a poetic heart seeing to the core of each write. I deeply appreciate your reads and interpretations and feel most humbled by your generous comments.

[Marie]

Most welcome always, dear Soren... Thank you for your very kind words...