Doubt

Doubt's coal burns a hole where shame chars its name

smoke obscures, vision blurs, with the flame of smoldering blame

unsteady hand embers fanned Sputtering spark sets fire to the dark

from tears of guilt a lake is built, high watermark on white bark

Reviews

[Marie]

Shame can blur one's vision like smoke when we blame not ourselves but others when doubt steps into one's mind. We fan the embers of the fire of doubt until the smoke burns our eyes and tears of guilt and blame spring up, to the point where we are almost drowned within them! Wow! What a magical poem which captivated this reader. A truly intriguing gem, superbly inked. Thank you for sharing, dear poet...

[Soren]

Thank you for digging this one up. Your remarks are most gracious and deeply appreciated. Thank you humbly

[Marie]

Most welcome always, dear poet...

[Amy R]

Oh, what a powerful poem, it shows how emotions can flood someone's mind when it's negative,

The use of personification with phrases like "tears of guilt" and "lake is built" to give emotions human-like qualities.

Well penned.
-Amy

[Soren]

Thank you Amy your most generous and kind remarks are valued and appreciated

[Amy R]

You're very welcome Soren! 🤍

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Shame, blame and name calling....sounds like our politicians these days...
and the sputtering spark...old flames finally pass on the torch to others...or should.

[Soren]

Thanks Jacob I so appreciate your visits and value your comments.

[Betty Hermelee]

Shame, blame, guilt, tears... these are sorrowful words Soren....this is a very dark, descriptive poem
about these moods; the only hope i see is the lake, perhaps a symbol of new life, nutrients for the earth, otherwise all is dark and gloomy, like black coal....my interpretation....heavy stuff...
Warmly, B

[Soren]

Thank you Betty for the read and interpretation that runs pretty much on target. However there must be darkness to have light. Thank you so much for the review and interpretation.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome Soren🌷
Warmly, B

[Ken Simm.]

What extraordinary and descriptive wordage. I love this piece of art literature.

[Soren]

Ken I thank you for your most generous words from a wordsmith like yourself I feel humbled.