Time squozen

I squeeze the clock to slow time

Breaking it does not stop shadows passing

A face with hope's grime

three pointing hands each the other surpassing

Metal gears

it is its teeth that give it power

eating years

chewing down seconds and hour

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I enjoyed this immensely. Love the phraseology employed. Reminds me of a Dali painting...those melting clocks draped over trees and the candle wax landscape. Whether it melts away, is eaten away, flies away or runs on I think "away" is the brutal truth of it. Ah well, I say let's enjoy it while we may.

[Soren]

Thank you so much Fabian Yes Dali paintings came to mind when I thought of posting this but I thought it might be a bit trite.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I wrote a tribute to one of his paintings once The Metamorphosis of Narcissus. I've no idea where it is now, maybe in my hard copy somewhere.

[carl]

also, such a great word Squozen - makes sense - after all if something you freeze becomes frozen, stands to reason something you squeeze becomes squozen?

[Soren]

Yea I just threw that in as a bit of fun. In my childhood I often heard this neologism

[carl]

such a great expression of the work of time. "breaking it does not stop the shadows passing" that's the real indication of passage those shadows across the lawn or down the wall. great image line. - I've had it someplace in the back of my mind to do a poem where time is a road that moves under us as we stand in one spot. Haven't been able so far to make much sense of it but maybe ..... in time I will figure it out. lol - enjoyed the read - take care -carl

[Soren]

Carl from you these words mean a great deal. That seems such an inventive idea I hope that it takes form. I will look forward to reading it.

[Thomas W Case]

Wow. Tremendous work. Time is a killer. You make this point clear as day here. Great work.

[Soren]

Thank you very much for the read and kind comment. It is appreciated/

[Betty Hermelee]

Your powerful words show me that you want the clock to stop and it keeps on ticking...you bring the clock to life like an animal chewing on a dead one...the clock has teeth (like a beast) and it chews down time, eating not humans, but seconds, minutes, hours and years! a great metaphor to show us that time moves too quickly for us....and in reality we can't turn the clock back.....so we grow old with time and then comes the end....sorry to be so maudlin!
Warmly, B

[Soren]

Thanks Betty you are quite accurate in your interpretation. I appreciate your read and kind understanding words.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Soren
Warmly, B