Past undone

A song begins at the end

Stretched tape now broken

A road that doesn't bend

Words are not unspoken

Ages unspooled can't go back

Seconds linger

History in a torn sack

A clock in a wringer

Time eats it's shadow

Death jumps in a hole

Liberal rednecks in Colorado

A hangman climbs a barber pole

Reviews

[carl]

much enjoyed - read and repeat to get filled - reeks of energy (in a good way) - many jewels enclosed "history is a torn sack" - time eats its shadow" great images - great flow - thanks for the post -carl

[Soren]

Thanks Carl those words mean a lot from a poet like yourself.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I like the title love the first line but as I read I realize I can't go back, in this write there are answers but just one question, what do I do and one answer left, move foward. Thank you for sharing.

[Soren]

True so true thanks so much for the read and the comment it is deeply appreciated.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Ur welcome I'm going to shelve this write in my library, thank you.

[Poetic Beauty]

This to me sounds like when all is lost and the world has turned up side down.

Time eats it shadow. Is my favored line.
Makes me think of time going backwards instead of marching on forward.

[Soren]

Thank you so much for your review and observant comments. You are right about the line.

[Poetic Beauty]

It was an interesting read. Reminded me of an abstract painting or drawing

[nadia dmitri]

I love the last stanza and the line "Time eats it's shadow". Your diction is always so creative and enticing, a beautiful and thoughtful image is always created. Amazing work :)

[Soren]

Thank you most humbly for both the read and most gracious comment you are very kind.

[Thomas W Case]

I like the abstract mixed with the concrete.

[Soren]

Thanks so much for the read Thomas it is appreciated.

[Ken Simm.]

This is surrealism and impossibilities I think. Clocks in wringers, liberal rednecks, (that is a frightening thought) and so on. A song of opposites.

[Soren]

In many ways Ken there are many incompatible incongruencies that do occur if one looks at them such, just look at politics. Thanks so much for the review and interesting comment.

[Chris Shaw]

The last two lines I feel are the key to this poem, but I do not understand the history of past events in Colorado. I have images forming in my head of lynchings. Whatever, the poem comes across as dark, but the past undone offers some light. Dear Soren, I would love you to reveal your thinking behind your words. I very rarely ask this of a poet:)

Chris

[Soren]

Thank you so much Chris for the read and query. I will give a couple of hints, one time runs in circles and extremes become one another little difference between the practical aspects of communism and fascism, Colorado you are right was a cowboy town but now is one of the most liberal places and one of the first to legalize the use of marijuana. It has come full circle and the beginning becomes the end. The last line I will leave to peoples imagination because it too ties in but in a different way.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you my friend for the pointers