A Parting Wish

I envy the breeze that caresses your face

kissing your neck and skin

I'm jealous of the sun, that encircles you in a warm embrace,

bathing your body with a smile of light, where I would've liked to have been

I covet your shadow as you hug it so tightly

wrapped around you, an intercourse with no sin

Oh that I were the evening air that you breath nightly

through the darkness, touching you so tenderly within

I wish that I could be your most intimate thought

stripped naked to reveal the beauty of all that you are

Wet from the rain of tears when we parted

I always believed that you would return from afar

To staunch the hemorrhaging caused by your absence

I longingly yearn to be the sands of time

blown back by that breeze, to before I first saw you

prior to ever dreaming that you might be mine

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Incredibly beautiful in its intenseness Soren. An exceptional write.

Wet from the rain of tears
when we parted

Chris

[Soren]

Thank you Chris for your most kind words of encouragement.

[Nima.Hope]

There was a woman in my life, I loved her exactly with your words in this perfect poem. I remember I used to talk to her before my sleep in my fantasies.. I would tell her "I envy the pillow you put your face on, for it can touch your beautiful face but I can't...".
Bravo Soren,well done. I hope you reach your beloved,alas I couldn't.

[Soren]

Thank you so much for your most kind words and encouragement it is deeply appreciated.

[Nima.Hope]

You're welcome 🌸

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You want to be all of those elements that get to touch her..."wet from the rain of tears"
shows it all.
j.

[Soren]

Thank you Jacob for the review it is deeply appreciated.

[emmajoygreen]

If there is a better July-written poem about the intensity of love. than yours, Soren. I would be surprised. Your words set fire to thought.. and, methinks. their embers will smoke and spark for quite a while.

'Oh that I were the evening air that you breath nightly
through the darkness, touching you so tenderly within.. '

[Soren]

Thank you so much Emmajoy for you most gracious words of encouragement. They are deeply appreciated.

[Coyote Poetry]

Kind, sweet and wonderful words shared Soren.
"I longingly yearn to be the sands of time
blown back by that breeze, to before I first saw you
prior to ever dreaming that you might be mine"
I adored the above lines. When someone excite our heart and our mind. Our best days. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[willweb]

Wow, love poetry at its finest. Smooth, very smooth and touching my friend. This one will have her melting in your arms, no matter how cool the breeze is. Beautiful, I am impressed.

[Soren]

Thanks my friend I so appreciate this feed back from the master of love poems.

[Betty Hermelee]

Beautifully written, very warm and sensual, a want a desire like no other... your images are stunning and one can feel your emotions.... sadly you lost her, but your portrayal is very special, even if it might be a dream....
Lovely,
Warmly, B

[Soren]

Thank you so much Betty you are too kind in your comments but they are most appreciated.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome my friend
Warmly, B

[Archishman Rick]

This expression is rich in a beautiful, wistful longing. Although the writer speaks of certain feelings of envy, I did not perceive any contamination, only melancholy in this ingenuous presentation of loving desire. 'An intercourse with no sin', marvelous, truly says a lot.
Best wishes

[Soren]

I thank you most humbly for such kind words.