Argumentative Anxiety

Fearing foul feelings fomenting

Alert and agitated at attack

Pending pregnant pressure pressing

Beckoning brain bruised black

Bursting bottled bowels boiling

Worrying, what wounds words will wrack

Reviews

[JayG]

You're forcing the line to the needs of alliteration, which kills it.

"Peter Piper picked a peck of pickled peppers," makes sense to the reader. "Beckoning brain bruised black" doesn't. Remember, you have both context and intent guiding your understanding. The reader has neither. That's why it's critical to edit from the seat of a reader.

[Soren]

Thank you for your comment and help