Hangin'

Hangin'

A Poem by Sophy.

I'm starin at the phone
Waiting for you to text back
Been like this all night

I'm beggin you please
Don't leave me hangin
Like you did last time

There's an opportunity 
And I wanna take it
Let's see what this was about

Don't you wanna see me
Like I need to see you yeah
Please don't turn me down

Cuz I'm goin crazy
Am I crazy
To wanna see you now
After everything
I love you baby
I need to see you now
Don't leave hangin

Did you love me?
Or was it just all a game?

Did you mean what you said?
Or was I conveniently just far enough away?

I'm goin crazy
Am I crazy
To wanna see now
After everything
I still love you baby
I need to see you now
Don't leave me hangin

This chance won't come again
This is your only shot
I won't hang around all day
You're either in or you're not

Are you crazy
Did you even love me?
You don't wanna see me
After everything
I just need you baby
You never loved me
You left me hangin

© 2014 Sophy.


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4/5/18
6:58 PM U.S. CST
"My Review of Hangin' by Sophy, A Fellow Writer's Cafe Author"
by PB Jacobs (www.writerscafe.org)

Hey, Sophy

Well, um, I'm seeing dummy romance written all over this. Just don't take it as an insult, as I listen to a lot of music, and I mean a lot, and it all boils down to a majority of it being the same old boy meets girl, inward trail sign romance, with territorial instincts mixed in, for good measure.

You need to write from a different field of interest (rhetorical outfit), audience-wise, instead of the same old, same old, Mad Scientist Personality Type melodrama. Same field's, same humanity, if you really think about it, from there to here, especially in the mainstream media humanity.

I'd also consider things like affective saturation and intensity, in addition to field's. Your affective rhetoric is too consistent and stereotypical.

I don't know about you, but I'm the type of person who needs a new outfit, every now and then.

Don't take my review as an insult, as it's modern input. No need to fritter and wallow. Reality and fact's will prevail, instead of the same old Doctor's wanting the same old grants, with the same old terms and condition's, and if you really think about it, without the usual dummy, or better comeback's, ruthless coddler maneuver's, etc. I make perfect sense.

Dude, Your New Era! It can also mean on a personal level!

A Golden Rule of Life: If you don't get this right, you're gonna get screwed over! by Anonymous

Pb Jacobs

Posted 6 Years Ago


Haha this is awesome! A very modern love story :)

Posted 10 Years Ago



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