~Uncooked Noodles

Raw thoughts,balking pen

Putting the lid over raw confused thoughts,
Pressurizing my cranium..
To cook grains of the valves,

Temperature elevates around
The stubborn syllables,
Sentences steam out in
Disjoint whistling phrases....

Uncovering the ever mysterious puzzle
With my balking pen..
Grimacing,i taste
My uncooked noodles....

Author's Note

I Thought of trying something different from my usual style. Hope you enjoy :)

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

speaking of metaphors...this really "cooks"----pun intended.

love the title and how you bookend this poem by having it as a last line...

"grimacing"---one of my favorite words in the English language...

sometimes our thoughts just won't come to a boil, no matter how high we turn on the heat...the words won't come...yours do...nicely hear and come out tender and tasty.

[Sophy Freebirds]

This was cooked when i was suffering from writer's block :p... Glad you liked it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

best way to break through it is to write about it---always has worked for me.

[Sophy Freebirds]

It helped me too.... I guess :)..

[Einstein Noodle]

such a sublime chuckle in me after reading .. you do know ... you throw them at the wall and if it sticks .. its done :) love this poem ..
so glad to be meeting you!
E.

[success]

yh.. i did enjoy every bit of it. Interesting poem

[Frank]

I read this again, loved it again. I don't get the valves? Uhm... I don't agree with feminism, we do have different roles, I don't have a womb for instance :)

[Stephen]

Wow! this is a very short poem but has a lot to tell. I really enjoyed this and it definitely is unique in it's style, but it does not take away form your great writing, it just makes it that much greater. Thanks for sharing friend

[Frank]

Refreshing, I enjoyed. Suggest [undercooked] rather than [uncooked] you have been cooking the noodles so they are under done rather than not cooked at all.

You weave an interesting thread throughout mixing your cooking in a pressure cooker with the struggles of the poetic art. Well done!

[Gee]

Like the way you"cooked"this one up Sophy,very clever.

[Sophy Freebirds]

thank you :-)

[Matching Socks]

Great use of metaphors Sophy.
It reminds me of something Jacob would write.
That's a huge compliment,

[Sophy Freebirds]

yeah well thats in itself is an atlantic compliment :p hah. thank you so much

[Matching Socks]

Lol. :) yes it is.

[Eleanor]

This is full of imagination. Impressive!
I loved the use of metaphors in this one. We all have different ways of expressing our poetry.
I bet your noodles are tasty.
Would love to read more by you :) Thank you!

[RAOrourke]

Hi Sophy!
Loved these lines:
The stubborn syllables,
Sentences steam out in
Disjoint whistling phrases...everything was so cleverly written! Great job...when I saw the title I wasn't sure what I was in store for,lol, but great job!!