~Chasing the Mirage

Lost grain of sanity flows away,
Forming a pall of dusty atoms which sway...
Twirling around my naked soul,

Footsteps imprinted on the transient sands,
Milky rays chill me to my very bones.
Tameless winds ruins my
Poised hair strands...

In drunken frenzy of maenad's ecstacy,
I break into a wild run...
Pursuing my mirage of fantasy.

I run..... ohh.....i run
Till my feet turns sore...
Whips of life have battered
Me to my very core!
Grovelling in the sandy pool...
My dry tongue licks the red fluid...

Author's Note

Something really dark!!! Hope you enjoy... ;) xoxo

Reviews

[R Smith]

it sure is dark but that's my favourite type of poem, there's lots to find in here, the first stanza is gorgeous, such floating on a wind of beauty, the final lines throw you into despair at the sadness of finding your mirage that is probably a pool of your own blood, brilliant writing Sophy :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Wow.. i am so glad you liked this one Richard. You just got it right.thanks for your words i do appreciate it :)

[R Smith]

you will always be welcome Sophy :)

[Rounak Jain]

no. it was not dark like the other 2 i just read. very nice way of writing. powerful wide imagination.

[Sophy Freebirds]

:p lol.. i wrote this before i wrote that two. thank you for visiting my page :)

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethi..]

Darkness in not necessarily related to sadness and most certainly not in a relationship with hopelessness:)

You are right people often mistake us to be the sorrowful lot for the dark words we etch, but we know that is far away from the truth.

My type of poetry .. loved it:)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Glad i could serve you a dark coffee :) Sometimes readers fail to enter our mind ..thats the problem.. Thank you

[Coyote Poetry]

A wild journey and places in this poem.
"In drunken frenzy of maenad's ecstacy,
I break into a wild run...
Pursuing my mirage of fantasy."
The above lines took the reader into drunken madness. I like the poem. A straight forward madness came alive in your words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you for your kind words dear poet :-)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Stephen]

I think I am going to just read your poems for the rest of the night. They are very entertaining and thought provoking. I appreciate your work

[Sophy Freebirds]

:-)i am glad you find them interesting ... thank you for your kind words

[Manash Saikia]

my dry tongue licks the red fluid.. awesome line :) 666

[Linda alexander]

Run that is what we do, run after concrete dreams, pursue for mirage, trying to hold on to the shadows which are faster than us and keep on running to keep the momentum

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, the raving ones of Greek mythology.....darkness was their realm. You write in this haunting genre so well, Sophy. Lydi**

[Sophy Freebirds]

Aww. Thank you for your compliment Lydi. I am doing hip hpp here :D lol

[Angad Waraich]

Okay!
Dark yes, but also true we cannot achieve anything unless we work for it.
Vivid imagery.
I really enjoyed the opening stanza.

Well done.

Thank you for sharing.
-Angad

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you for your kind words. :)

[Angad Waraich]

You're most welcome.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Quite an interesting way of expressing the old saying, "No pain, no gain" you took it to a new level with your inspiring words.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much dear poet

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are most welcome sweet poet.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

darker than dark...beaten down to the core...lying in a pool of resignation....
red means stop...i am done fighting....life has won.

[Sophy Freebirds]

You gathered it correctly Jacob. But i must say i love to bleed my heart out. I have bot given up yet. Thank you so much for your words