~ Vanishing Isle

Solace in this desolation

Pulling the dark veil across my eyes,
Walking through this soul- less valley;
My foot- prints left in soil of lost spring...
Gloomy trees swaying to the
Rhythm of outcast mist....

Desolation envelopes me in his arms;
My heart beats fast against his subtle charm.
Loneliness thumbs away an escaped tear..

Hazy clouds dance in front of my eyes..
I fly a dove to land far by...
With a message-
"Will i ever escape from this land
Of gloomy sky??"

My anxious heart waits for the reply,
Time just fleets by and by..
Every moment passes,
Smothering my only hope to die.

Like a Shade under this moonless sky
Sans life,sans heart....
Where emotions and i part...
Accepting my cursed identity,
Doomed to survive for eternity..
In starkness.....
I try to find my Vanishing Isle...

Author's Note

Here Shade- the spirit of an immortal,who not only dies but dies twice.Enjoy the darknesss!!

Reviews

[M.A.Rathore]

The fantastic imagery that we see in all your work is superb. This classifies you an outstanding writer. You stud your images as they are the part of your excellent asthetic power. You describe your poem in pictorial art.Though all the images are worthy to praise yet here is the last stanza I like one of it...

Like a Shade under this moonless sky
Sans life,sans heart....
Where emotions and i part...
Accepting my cursed identity,
Doomed to survive for eternity..
In starkness.....
I try to find my Vanishing Isle...

Thanks keep writing...
Have a nice time...

[Sophy Freebirds]

Ohh my gosh. I am humble.thank you dear poet. Will be coming for your works.

[M.A.Rathore]

Thanks..welcome.....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sophie this is has a beautiful melancholy to it that flows through a well constructed verse. Losing ones identity and hope described in a very interesting metaphor.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you John.. glad you liked it ;)

[raj24]

enjoy the darkness.....actually very dark.......u just didn't let us move out of it with this wonderful work...

"Desolation envelopes me in his arms;
My heart beats fast against his subtle charm.
Loneliness thumbs away an escaped tear.. "

my fav part... u are getting better with all shades of life..wonderful

Raj

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much Raj :) will be reviewing you soon

[Lyan]

dark and powerful, filled with emotion.it's similar to how a depressed person may feel.your poem hints to that well.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thanks a lot amiga :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad and beautiful journey you took me with. Hard to look for places missed and cannot find them. I like the feel of search and the strong ending. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much dear poet.will be coming for your works too :)

[Rene Salinas]

It makes me want to jump in real quick into this as if I could hold you hand Sophy and you could hold yours out and drag me in and up of this train you are riding. This feeling that you have here one that to me is very dear, although looked through your eyes different aspects appears. I sense tenderness and acceptance, not lethargic but also not fighting. It is intriguing as you seem to have gained objectivity while searching for something.

I have made piggybacking into a skill

Thankyou

[Sophy Freebirds]

Ohh yea.. you've nailed it on the head.SEARCH.thank you so mucj for the thoughtful review ;)

[Somenath Nag]

You seem to have created a mystic world ….. A brilliant blend of darkness and sensuousness …… The urge to escape the land of gloom metaphorically raises the question of existential crisis ……Loved this piece Sophy … U r like my muse…..

[Sophy Freebirds]

Ohh my gosh!! I am humbled dear poet.. thank you so much :)

[Mayank]

Its gloomy, imagery and feeling of forlorn is right there... the words entangles your imagination!

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much Mayank ;)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

What a reactive delve into the mind of someone with depression… and always you have a way with words.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much ;)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are so very welcome.

[J. Land]

Beautifully imagined and rendered. Fantastic imagery. I thoroughly enjoy your poetic take on mythology.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much sir ;)

[R Smith]

oh such dark words but beautiful writing wrung from tortured emotions, well done Sophy, a wonderful poem.

[Sophy Freebirds]

;) gracias Richard. I appreciate your kind words