~ Vanishing Isle

Solace in this desolation

Pulling the dark veil across my eyes,
Walking through this soul- less valley;
My foot- prints left in soil of lost spring...
Gloomy trees swaying to the
Rhythm of outcast mist....

Desolation envelopes me in his arms;
My heart beats fast against his subtle charm.
Loneliness thumbs away an escaped tear..

Hazy clouds dance in front of my eyes..
I fly a dove to land far by...
With a message-
"Will i ever escape from this land
Of gloomy sky??"

My anxious heart waits for the reply,
Time just fleets by and by..
Every moment passes,
Smothering my only hope to die.

Like a Shade under this moonless sky
Sans life,sans heart....
Where emotions and i part...
Accepting my cursed identity,
Doomed to survive for eternity..
In starkness.....
I try to find my Vanishing Isle...

Author's Note

Here Shade- the spirit of an immortal,who not only dies but dies twice.Enjoy the darknesss!!

Reviews

[M.A.Rathore]

The fantastic imagery that we see in all your work is superb. This classifies you an outstanding writer. You stud your images as they are the part of your excellent asthetic power. You describe your poem in pictorial art.Though all the images are worthy to praise yet here is the last stanza I like one of it...

Like a Shade under this moonless sky
Sans life,sans heart....
Where emotions and i part...
Accepting my cursed identity,
Doomed to survive for eternity..
In starkness.....
I try to find my Vanishing Isle...

Thanks keep writing...
Have a nice time...

[Sophy Freebirds]

Ohh my gosh. I am humble.thank you dear poet. Will be coming for your works.

[M.A.Rathore]

Thanks..welcome.....

[Stephen]

Another enjoyable read. Definitely a tone of darknes, sadness, a sense of wanting have something that just vanishes the closer you get to it. Thanks for sharing

[jennifer little]

great work i enjoyed reading your poem keep the amazing work up

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you :)

[RAOrourke]

Pulling the dark veil across my eyes,
Walking through this soul- less valley;
My foot- prints left in soil of lost spring...
Gloomy trees swaying to the
Rhythm of outcast mist... Wow! Sophy this is beautiful written and your first part flows so beautifully with such delicate yet vivid imagery. Well done!

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much :)

[kublakhan27]

It probably goes without saying that I relate deeply to this piece my friend...the balancing of optimism and despair is something that will always grip me when I find it in a poem, especially coming from you, whose work I find so easy to relate to anyway ;) Try as we might, tears do escape sometimes...I loved the image of loneliness thumbing it away, though it's sad that loneliness must be relied upon here to do it...and the image of flying a dove really took my breath away...it adds a dreamlike element and is probably my favourite part of the piece...yes there were many parts that spoke to me in volumes, and I think the last stanza is the place where I truly found myself...how I long to depart from the emotions that dog me, and come to grips with what feels so often like a cursed identity...surviving may feel like a doomed fate, but at least we're surviving in some way...awesome work Sophy, one of my new favourites for sure :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Awww.. how i love it when someone relates.. :) yes Steve the strongest of us do hise tears behind that fake smiles... :) glad you could connect to it.. ★takecare★

[Tom]

The human soul was never meant to live in complete isolation and solitude and therefore despite valiant efforts to seek comfort, it will inevitably perish!

A creative contemplation Sophy, penned in imaginatively expressive poetic form !

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much Tom.. sometimes our spirit wanders to dark places to search for truth.. :)

[Ashira Macy]

I have never heard of Shade before, but it certainly sounds like a lonely life, one that perhaps the immortal didn't feel he wanted anymore. You can really feel the despair pooling between each word. Very well done, I always love to see people's darker sides peek out every now and again.

[Sophy Freebirds]

My darker sidr was oozing out when i wrote this.. lol :) thank you girl

[Frieda P]

Geez you can feel the emptiness of a soul in this write Sophy....not good to hang out in the shade too long but it does make for brilliant poetry. Darkly emotive, nicely written in blood ink.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Lol.. i think i am back from shadow now.. :) thank you Freida

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this made me very sad....i have a close friend right now whose life is in crisis mode....i am very worried about his state of mind...

it is much like what you describe here---

i know the poem isn't quite about what he is going through, but i relate on that level, Sophy---

and there is a slight comfort in that for me.
thanks for this poem.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Few days ago i was in that state too. I wrote this then.. I am glad you could connect to it :)

[Naina]

Very well written sophy.. One can see the darkness through your poem... N I like especially the last para

"Like a Shade under this moonless sky
Sans life,sans heart....
Where emotions and i part...
Accepting my cursed identity,
Doomed to survive for eternity..
In starkness.....
I try to find my Vanishing Isle... "

It is just so good.... Nice poem..... Keep writing...:))

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you Naina.. :) will be coming for your works too

[Naina]

pleasure is mine Sophy......:))