~Kiss in the rain

Union of virility and feminity

Pelting droplets in the lane;
Virile mars walks in rain.
Going where his footsteps led..
He stretches the umbrella over his head.

Defending himself against the critical droplets,
With a guarded formidable exterior,
Backbone made from a rod of steel..
Striving towards his goal with a zeal.

His breath is caught in his throat,
As he watches venus moving as a bolt.
Water washes over her lovely face,

Chilly wind blows away his defence from his grasp;
Replaced by her tender understanding hands..
She tiptoes ,whispering kindly in his ears
"Life is not waiting for the storm to pass dear,
It is learning to dance in the rain"
Brushing her soft lips against his..
They reach a state of bliss..
Yearning droplets flow from their tangled bodies..
Shimmering as some glittering rubies..

Lightening strikes her twice;
He fiercely hugs her tight.
Answering her relieved sigh-
"It was not a flash which came by,
But a realisation that- you are only mine"

The thunder roars his approval..
At the union of Mars and venus so real..!!
On the blessed earth's surface..
The almighty divinely paired,
Our human race.....

Author's Note

A concept of Mars and venus;masculinity and feminity- the primal pair.. Questions were raised am i a man- hater,ha ..:) so here it goes- the combination of both,blended together into a tale.Hope you like the taste..

Reviews

[Stephen]

That was very passionate!! I really liked the taste. I really love your style and you write your poems with words that emits a beautiful tune to the ears of those reading.

[Sophy Freebirds]

:) its a pleasure when my readers come and read what guides them. through their own freewill . thank you so much Stephen :)

[J. Land]

Sometimes love roars in the thunder, sometimes she brushes in the night. It is not the weight of her touch that matters, but the depth of her strike. I love the rhythm of this poem. You use mythology and allusion so well in much of your work. This one is especially "striking." ;)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Aww.. glad for that Jim :)

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

I really liked this! The description was nice and to me, it flowed quite nicely :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of description.
"Lightening strikes her twice;
He fiercely hugs her tight.
Answering her relieved sigh-
"It was not a flash which came by,
But a realisation that- you are only mine"
The above lines stood out for me. We need to know the thunder of real love. No weakness in the poem. You held me to the last words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sophy Freebirds]

I am glad you perceived the message clearly :) thank you friend.

[-- Manish --]

Great Work Sophie.. wow what an imaginary and it has a message as well
"Life is not waiting for the storm to pass dear,
It is learning to dance in the rain"
Well done...
My best wishes..

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much Manish :)

[Tom]

I like how Venus uses her wily famine charms to assuage the testosterone fuelled angst of masculine Mars!

An impressive, expressive creatively penned poem, top write Sophy !

[Sophy Freebirds]

Wow.. Tom you nailed in on the head.I just wamted to convey that and you got it right. Thank you so much for your amazing review ;)

[MAC]

simply amazing....great concept poetically delivered to perfection

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you Mark..looking forward to reviewing your works too :)

[Harmartia Poe]

This is magical :) You have developed a gorgeous romance between two planets --- that is quite an achievement :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Ohh wow.. thanks Sammie :)

[Frieda P]

Gorgeous imagery, you took an old concept and made it uniquely your own, and brand new I might add. Dancing in the rain and being struck by lightning twice, where do I sign up? ;) Excellent Sophy, subtle fireworks being blasted here. Man-hater, now who had the dang nerve to say that?!

[Sophy Freebirds]

Ahh !! I have got a sympathizer then.. ;) well you know how it is★ guys sometimes suck★ Thank you so much Freida

[Frieda P]

No comment there, I get myself in too much trouble! :) My pleasure always Sophy.

[Rene Salinas]

Oh how gentle your descriptions are as if even with your words you wouldn't want to infringe on anyone or anything the rain is said and depicted as subtle but it won't hurt "Just a little rain " . And the is faced by more than just caressing a message , and what a message I guess the Ondines were kind that day and decided to hsare some of their wisdom. But then it really unfold and it becomes a writing with an all ecompassing message of acceptance and unity of bravery and admittance.

Enchanting beauty here

Thankyou Sophy

[Sophy Freebirds]

Wow.. thank you so much for your insightful review.You very well perceived the message. :)