Treacherous Sands

Drowning in the hunger of acclaimation

The glittering sands of ovation,
Beckoned me to move to the temptation.
Stepping my feet into it
I let the enthusiastic cheers envelope me.

Slowly my feet sink into it;
As the realisation hit.
The traitorous wind jeering,
The gloomy seagulls crying.
I Drown lower and lower into
The treacherous sands....

Engulfing in my own fallacy;
I try to break away from fantasy.
But in the thoughtless pursuit;
Of acclaimation...
I have deprived myself of;
My own recognition..

Amending myself ,to impress ....
I've abandoned to express.....

Author's Note

A thought newly penned.. I guess you will like it and try to express your thoughts freely...

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

I guess we should always live by the words "always be yourself".
It's easy to lose our path though. :)

Great poem Sophy. Really good write, full of truth.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you Ance :) glad you liked it

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

I like surreal poetry more than I actually do with straight forward. I think what surreal poetry does is to let the reader believe whatever the poem is about, to have their own meaning to it. I really enjoyed this one, Sophy.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you Greg for your kind review. :)

[Edward Lancheister]

i like the words that written

Engulfing in my own fallacy;
I try to break away from fantasy.
But in the thoughtless pursuit;
Of acclaimation...
I have deprived myself of;
My own recognition..

well written poem

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you Edward.. :)

[J. K. Beach]

Sophy, you have a new one!

This poem has a lot of truth ringing through it--seldom do we do our best work when we do our work just for the cheers and recognition. Writing, any art really, starts in our body/mind/soul first! You have written this more poetically, but it's true enough to deserve repeating many times. You have done very well for just recently having penned this piece. The flow is nice and even. I did notice one thing at the end... where you say 'Amending myself ,to impress .... /I've abandoned to express..... || did you mean, 'Amending [myself, to] impress .... /I've abandoned [me]to express..... ? One is a typo with spacing around a coma, the other is just that you said "abandoned" but not what was abandoned. I assumed it was you[me] Another lovely little poem... good job!

[Sophy Freebirds]

thank you for noticing the typo,i will correct it ASAP.Mobiles can be tricky.. ha.. ;) n yea that is - i have abandoned expressing myself!( my thoughts) thank you for the thoughtful review..

[Happy hours]

newly and greatly penned down... :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you Anshul for your kind review.. :)

[Happy hours]

you're welcome :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh geez, sophy...i like this so much...

if we write just for the acclaim, for the publications, just to impress...we lose the heart and soul of what we are really trying to accomplish...which is express the really deep feelings that only poetry written from the heart can contain and maintain....

[Sophy Freebirds]

Ohh wow!! :) i am glad you liked it.. and yea i agree with you..write down your thoughts not forced but spontaneous.. thank you for the fantastic review..