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Cage of perfection

Cage of perfection

A Poem by Sophie
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The protagonist struggles with distinguishing life's reality from the illusion of fantasy due to their overwhelming feelings of love for someone who is bad for them.

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moonlight glistens on the ripples and makes leaves reflect subtle silver stars. 

awake. anxious. alone. and in this hour 
thoughts have sparked a hurricane in my mind, 
they emerge while rushing forward to rewind. 

is this all my mind's own illusion? 
the picture so perfect, despite all life's pollution. 

how can something so beautiful and pure, 
dare to lure 
me in here. drag me out. 
thinking you know me, without any doubt. 

sweet temptation of the moon, 
i know that all you will lead to is tears and gloom. 
but you disguise yourself with that sweetest smile, 
pretending you're innocent and fragile. 

i have a little surprise for you, 
i previously dared not to utter this truth. 

i am not who you think and not what you want 
my thoughts they shift from front to back to front. 

sweet moonlight, you reminded me of the days 
when i was still blessed by the sun's sweet rays. 

but i have been changed. 

by what, you ask? 

this perfect moment with you has changed my flow 
the hurricane is changing its turn 
i think it's time. time for me to go. 

i remember the warmth of the sun's loving rays, 
i remember those memories, the harmonious days, 
when you and me were young and free,
no decisions to make and nowhere to be.

and now you have left me behind, you're up in the clouds. 
floating so high I haven't seen you for hours. 

moonlight, you forced yourself in this hurricane with me, 
I don't want to stay here with you, please help set me free.

© 2017 Sophie


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everything followed a common plan which I do understand but I really am confused because this is like confusing... sorry to ask did you wanted to commit suicide?...just asking

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is very well written and the imagery is beautiful, but it sounds remarkably like a suicide note. Was that your intention?

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sophie

7 Years Ago

Thank you for you positive review! I did not aim for my poem to sound like a suicide note, more to d.. read more
The Iron Horseman

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the explanation. I agree with you that everybody has their own interpretation of any w.. read more
First of all, the sound in your poem is very pleasant, the rhythmic tone makes the reader feel it... Even though the protagonist wants to find freedom from the 'cage', the reader can see a peaceful feeling in the poem even though there is a feeling of old memories being missed. Selection of words here are beautiful. Very well done...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sophie

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your encouraging feedback!

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Added on May 13, 2017
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