In Full Motion

With each breath in

My mind hollows.

All my thoughts

They turn to sorrow.

I relive all my nightmares

And dream up all my mistakes,

I wonder if what I'm doing is right

Or whether my past is a disgrace.

My eyes locked in place

But my brain in full motion,

I am still here and that is devotion. 

Underestimated self, still feeling the pressures of previous cards dealt.

Holding up strong face but it's bound to come crashing down.

Silent quiet quite serious, precarious, delirious.

Deliriously sane.

It's inhumane.

Tame,

Chill,

Take a seat,

Be well.

Breathe in and out.

Hold together and shout.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This has a "keep calm and carry on" kind of vibe to it, and it's good, even if that wasn't the intention. The sentiments are clear and strong, and it flows relatively nicely. If you don't mind me nitpicking a little, there are a couple of small errors I'd like to address:

- "with each BREATH in" ("breathe" is the verb)
- Lines 3 and 4 have a odd flow and message to them, that I strongly advice a tweak so that they convey their message with a better punch.
- (something to think about for poetic power): either "I relive every part of my nightmares/And dream up all OF my mistakes" OR "I relive all my nightmares/And dream up all my mistakes" (the two "of"'s and the shortened lines pack a stronger punch with the consistent structure....but as I said, it's something to think about....you're under no obligation to make this change).
- "or whether my past is A disgrace" OR "....is disgracED" (in my opinion, though, the first one has the full rhyme)
- everything else is simply make sure you add the right punctuation where necessary, for that would help guide the readers in how to read the poem, and understand which thoughts go with each other (there are some periods that I think need to be commas).

Forgive me if I seemed a little harsh, just wanting to suggest ways in which you could improve. Take them as you fancy. This is a great poem as a whole. Well done!