Sweet Servitude

Sweet Servitude

A Poem by sonnie ibadah

There's Heaven in her smile.
He sees it.
He seeks it.
And when she lets him,
He drowns in it.

© 2020 sonnie ibadah


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I like the poetic minimalism. I'm not certain I should like to "drown" in any experience. Bathe in it perhaps, but not drown. I understand the total immersion of baptism... the Christian rebirth. But to drown has rather negative connotations for me. I'm of the opinion that love, like truth, sets us free; rather than making us slaves unable to breathe. But thank you for a thought invoking read.

Posted 3 Years Ago


sonnie ibadah

3 Years Ago

Thank you for the insightful review.
Beautifully expressed, when you can take few words to paint a nice picture, that is art ;-]

Posted 4 Years Ago


sonnie ibadah

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind review :)
He sounds a bit like a puppet on a string but apparently a well rewarded puppet
some strings can be very tempting

Posted 4 Years Ago


sonnie ibadah

4 Years Ago

Lol! I love the analogy. Thanks Dave.
A delightful love poem well penned. “Heavenly to read and drown in. :) glad I stopped by :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


sonnie ibadah

4 Years Ago

Thank you Katrina :)
Ahh this is beautiful really !!!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


sonnie ibadah

4 Years Ago

Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks Julie :)
The weaker sex, don't believe it.
Great way to drown mind you, and they do say you recall everything when you drown.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Very good use of words and thoughts. No wasted words written. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to the proper ending. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


sonnie ibadah

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your beautiful review Coyote :)
Coyote Poetry

4 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend.
Will she let him die then? :)
Enjoyed this simple and beautiful poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


sonnie ibadah

4 Years Ago

Thanks buddy :)
AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Your welcome buddy 🤗
This is romantically lovable!
Few words that describes it all.
Love is love, don't hold it back once you feel it. Let it be made known to that person and from there, your life will feel blessed.

Great work, Sonnie.



Posted 4 Years Ago


sonnie ibadah

4 Years Ago

Thak you Kay, glad you liked it :)

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Added on February 21, 2020
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