goodbye

goodbye

A Story by marie
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had a good friend die 4/18/13

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cloudy vision
oceans fall
i can't breathe
help me i call

another life fallen
to that horrible drink
laughing brown eyes
on the pavement sink

one mans decision
stole your breath
countless hearts broken
in heaven you rest

God look down here
grant me this favor
wrap me in your arms
your love i will savor

© 2013 marie


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ohhhhh so painul and i can really relate given the fact i also just lost two close relatives.....
MAY THE GOOD LORD be with you amidst your toils

Posted 11 Years Ago


marie

11 Years Ago

thank you for the review, thank you for you well wishes, it means a lot
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Very sad, I know this feeling well, so sorry you had the to write this one....

Posted 11 Years Ago


marie

11 Years Ago

thank you for your sympathy, it means a lot
it's always hard to lose a loved one. i'm sorry for your loss...xox beautiful poem you've made of it hun

Posted 11 Years Ago


Lina Grey

11 Years Ago

of course :) may he rest in peace
marie

11 Years Ago

thank you:)
Lina Grey

11 Years Ago

:)
It was a rather traumatic incident, I can tell. Were both killed in the accident? Also, excellent write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


marie

11 Years Ago

yeah...
Ethale Captor

11 Years Ago

Such will be paid for.
marie

11 Years Ago

i know.
Godly one!! good and divine touched

Posted 11 Years Ago


marie

11 Years Ago

thank you:) i'm glad you liked it:)
this is gorgeous. i have lost family and friends in the last few years. it is painful. you have this posted as a story, you may want to change the status to poetry... you'll get more reads. well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


marie

11 Years Ago

i'm sorry meant to put it as poetry, was anxious to put it up so i did it before i could back out..... read more
Awwwwwwwww!

I had tears in my eyes, so many lovely written lines. It is really hard losing a friend, especially someone close to you. Sorry for you loss hun

Posted 11 Years Ago


marie

11 Years Ago

i've known this person for almost seven years now... met him while my sister was dating her husband... read more
I am so so sorry for your loss! Losing a friend is always painful :(


Posted 11 Years Ago


marie

11 Years Ago

thank you so much!:) it really means a lot:)
StayAnchored

11 Years Ago

Of course :)
marie

11 Years Ago

:)

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Added on April 22, 2013
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Tags: death, cry, tears, breathe, drunk, driver, broken, hearts

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