goodbye

had a good friend die 4/18/13

cloudy vision

oceans fall

i can't breathe

help me i call

another life fallen

to that horrible drink

laughing brown eyes

on the pavement sink

one mans decision

stole your breath

countless hearts broken

in heaven you rest

God look down here

grant me this favor

wrap me in your arms

your love i will savor

Reviews

[Abhilash Hegde]

Beautifully worded!
The poem flows all over you and washes you away in it's entirety..
Keep sharing :) Thanks

[anxia]

I am sorry. Shes in a better place. May you find comfort in his embrace.

[marie]

Its a hurt yes but i know i will see him again

[CreativeStroke]

It is always so hard when you lose someone youtruly care about and love. Especially when it was something tragic they went through. My heart goes out to you and I am sorry for your loss.
The poem was beautiful.

[marie]

thank you

[Dhaye]

Losing someone you love is really heartbreaking. But then we have to stop and pray, that we may bear all the pains it brought us, and wish her/him to be on His loving arms.

May he/she rest in peace...

[marie]

john is resting in heaven now, of that i have no doubt, you are absolutely right about the prayer this tragedy has greatly awakened my prayer life... for that i am thankful... just wish it didn't have to come at such a high price...

[Speakoftherevol]

(cont)>>> I know they would be happy they have such a focused bygone rememberance as most people really don't know what to say to the spark or blasts made amongst people a thousand and one dawns that inflame the memory lanes for every yesterday they wished would wake, for just one sombers say. It's such a crazy messed up world these days :(. God bless and sorry for the long 3 part review but that's what I got out of It. Keep It up.
-Brandon

[marie]

again thank you for the amazing reviews, though they really are worth reading, thank you for reading this and reviewing... i'm glad you liked the piece, thank you for your sympathy

[Speakoftherevol]

Yw my pleasure ;-) actually I should thank you, personal topics to me are THE hardest to give justice to, things change, but so far the work I've read from you seems to be ready for an Impenetrable time capsule!, so awesome stuff.

[marie]

most of the time i write from my own experience, no time to process just the pure raw emotion of that moment... so if thats what it takes to become great that is what i will do

[Speakoftherevol]

(cont)>> In a naken light, all of the words just dispeirce Into place...given a grave of tragic- beauty- trajected, on rosen dreams and granites dawn on lith solidarity, protection of testimony and purpose shoretold high by your sheen memory; of their life and showing what it can reely mean, no more lucids, which will hopefully now be forever realized, not only In memior as you are the testimony of their unwavering sunkindust touch and the only brutality which will preside Is your hardcore feelings always beating through Infainity silences to be In-balm with solace fluwen, to wherever they may broyale admirashone wraped up t'heir; reign''s love made of you at brightest fairs .

[Speakoftherevol]

First of all sorry for your loss and for what It's worth may God bless that friend from one struggling believer on this earth to another.. I honestly know no words truly console that type of pain. This poem tribute on the other hand Is exceptional!. It's so simple and pure, yet Intoxicatingly deep In a sea of relative sadness, and leaves me feeling vibes of how much you are unbreakably touched to near numbness love, for a fallen one, all of the peices sure lift the bond you had/have with this person up.

[Nick.B]

Sorry about your loss, a great tribute...

[marie]

thank you

[Rose of Gondor]

Oh dear....I'm so sorry...

[marie]

its alright, not your fault.... thank you though...

[Prritiy]

a touching write. May his soul rest in peace.

[marie]

thank you

[Prritiy]

most welcome :)