coals of life

look into my eyes

see the writhing anger

see the passion in disguise

see the growing danger

words flicking across the tongue

they can warm they can harm

not to close, they're still young

quickly now, you disarm

twirl around in lovely dances

scream and shout in twisted pain

they call it all happenstances

draw near, run again

this thin line, none mistake

between hells ground and heavens gate

start now a step to take

there's no escaping your true fate

i come, i go

controlled yet wild

thrashing to and fro

yearning as an innocent child

they all wonder, they all stare

pushing back pulling forth

answering unwanted call

giving out for all i'm worth

taking one, burn away

steal another, never stay

staying here i can play

calling out, the wood does fray

raging plains

welcome hearth

strength still wanes

loves new hearts

love and anger

ice and fire

safe and danger

opposite desire

blackened ground

impossible air

lost without sound

isn't life so fair

raindrops come and raindrops go

vainly trying, don't let me grow

their time is short, my time is long

listen to my crackle just like a song

Reviews

[Shadowfax]

Great job Umbrella!!! Love the personification!!!!

[marie]

Nanks you banana:)

[Shadowfax]

I know right

[marie]

:D

[Shadowfax]

:P

[Ethale Captor]

Excellent, I was waiting for your next upload. I believe your poetry is getting better and better with each write. Your are more capable of packing just the right emotions into just the right words to make your poems mean exactly what you want them to, and that is a skill I envy.

[marie]

Thank you so much!!:) but really your poetry is amazing!! I am the one in envy:)

[Prritiy]

a song of contrasts, loved the way it was built and processed.

[marie]

Thank you So much:) I'm really glad you liked it:)

[Prritiy]

:)

[marie]

:)

[Sir Joseph]

Amazing poem! Packed with emotion and a controlled chaos. Wonderful writing skills!:)

[marie]

Thank you so much I'm glad you liked it:)

[Sir Joseph]

It's an amazing poem, why wouldn't I?! :)

[marie]

Cause I just plopped it down:)lol

[Sir Joseph]

And dipped it in amazing sauce! :) lol

[marie]

Sauce? It was a marinade!

[Sir Joseph]

Same difference!!

[marie]

Marinade is for soaking!! Sauce is for dipping

[Sir Joseph]

Razzle Frazzle!

[StayAnchored]

That's an amazingly beautiful poem! It is filled with detail and emotion(not to mention the PERFECT rhyme scheme)!! Fantastic job, my friend! :)

[marie]

Goodness perfect?:) yay:) im so glad you liked it:) thank you:)

[Sir Joseph]

I agree!!

[marie]

How on earth is this perfect??:)

[StayAnchored]

You're welcome! It was amazing! :)

[marie]

:)

[zainul]

Yes,it is a song that hardly be left unsung!
Amazing and wonderful words danced on my tongue!

Got spell bound by the magic of your rhymes.

[marie]

I'm glad you liked it:) thank you for the review you have truly flattered me:)

[zainul]

Your piece is awesome!
So,my emotion swelled up to write the verses.
Thanks for stopping by,talented poet :)

[marie]

And thank you! For your kind words:) I am flattered

[zainul]

You are most welcome :)

[marie]

:)

[zainul]

:)

[Ashley G.]

Awesome I still love the first stanza just because it sounds great. I love the...what's the word- personification. The comparison of a flame to a feeling. =3

[marie]

I'm glad you like it buddy:)

[Ashley G.]

What's your next element going to be?

[marie]

Thinking something along the lines of wind