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sorry it took so long please tell me how i did:)

inside the town was a large building it had a thatched roof and cracked walls. this was the only building that dated back since before the time of the edrians. the humans came first, but they where brutes that killed the forest of any green healthy thing. the edrians were savage as well, but it was in a different kind of way. they valued the world so much that they killed their own kind for even harming a plant. the two beings where at war with no hope of it ever ending in sight. they had separated into two kingdoms one of edrians,  and one of humans. lillian was a human. 

Reviews

[Prritiy]

a new leaf has turned. liking the story more n more.

[marie]

Yay!:) cant wait for you to read the rest!:)

[Prritiy]

a new setting, liking the progress.

[Amaya Sullivan]

Here is the reveal and more information as to what is is going on. I like it this way as it is very different. This could be the beginning of chapter two; however, I am not sure as I am still reading...

[marie]

your probably right i just kind of like posting it in paragraphs

[Amaya Sullivan]

I like that you did it this way as well

[marie]

really?:) why?:)

[Amaya Sullivan]

There is a way to update the same chapter. Under "manage writing" when you edit the chapter be sure to click "updated version" be sure to check that box and it keep track on how many time you update it.

I do like how you did it here. It is a perfect sample of your writing, and I can see mistakes or easily quote the writing in the review. I would post maybe two paragraphs at least though just so you can pick up on the flow.

[marie]

thank you for the advice i will take it into account:)

[A.j. Dru]

This could possibly be the beginning of the second chapter. Again, we are still learning some back story, but the setting has changed and action has been taken.