never

do you regret  knowing me know

as you see my mind

inside these words

inside this this world

i draw you near

show you the beauty

of the letters

show the heart

inside the words

come closer now

feel the blood on my brow

and see that you where never loved by me

Reviews

[}Echo{]

This is a really cool poem. I like it. Great. :)

[marie]

Thanks:)

[Ethale Captor]

Excellent.

[marie]

thanks :) i try lol:)

[Sami Khalil]

inside these words
inside this world
I draw you near.
A very nice write.

[marie]

thank you like i told c.c. i wrote it for my math teacher, but it turned out for math in general:)

[Sami Khalil]

Smiling...

[marie]

:)

[Jo March]

and see that you where never loved by me

Do you mean 'were'?

Lovely poem, you have a nice writing style.

[marie]

Lol yeah I did mean were thanks for the comment I'll fix the mistake thanks for reading

[Santiago Veracruz]

I think you should cut even more words, play to the short hard-hitting emotion and really cut all the fat off in this one.

[marie]

K I'll try it tell me how it works:)

[C.C. Marx]

short but very emotional....nice work :)

[marie]

thanks i kind of wrote it on a whim in school not much thought went into it but i was kind of thinking of wrote it for my my math teacher but she's really sweet so i kind of think of it more for math in general lol:)