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the scent of rich spices and preserved meat wafted out towards her. she pushed past the tantalizing aromas and walked into the small pantry. she moved a container full of potatoes out of the way revealing her fathers old trunk. its wood told tales of long years upon the road. it had been a gift from her grandfather to her father as it had been for many generations passing on from generation to generation each owner placing a piece of themselves inside. she eased open the old trunk, its hinges squeaking the way all thing full of age did.

Reviews

[Prritiy]

nice description of food aroma and of old trunk being opened....

[Amaya Sullivan]

I am in love with the description of the old trunk. I'm not that great describing things like this. Kudos!

[marie]

it takes a little practice, i try and look around myself as i go around and think to myself exactly how i could put it down on paper to where the reader can picture it so well in there mind that they can almost reach out and touch it, it takes a little effort to begin with, but gets easier the more you do it:)

[Amaya Sullivan]

I have learned something today. I will have to practice doing this as a habit.

[marie]

it starts out as a pain, but it will greatly improve your descriptions and writing as a whole, pay attention to how you word it and write it down. give it to someone and ask them to tell exactly what they "see" when they read it. i will gladly do this for you should you require or simply wish me to:)