Standing in Shadows

This is my first serious attempt at writing poetry, and I think it turned out well, but why don't you be the judge of that?

Standing on the corner,
Soft rain veiling the masks
Everybody always wears.
All goes on
All in All

The sun dips
Behind trees,
Hands still tick
Yet seem to freeze
All goes on
All in All

Doors open,
Doors close
You ask yourself when
And realize nobody knows
All goes on
All in All

Masked faces stand
In the shadow of another,
Covering all the land
And causing all the bother
All goes on
All in All

People and all their chosen faces
Unconsciously clipping their own wings,
Without a thought their action erases
All the hope they ever had
To keep the good from the bad
All goes on
All in All

A look into the mirror reassures
That nobody is immune,
And there are no cures
Reality strikes like a monsoon
No more worry, no more fear
Through fresh eyes, the masks all disappear
All goes on
All in All                                                  

Reviews

[All faded blue]

I read this through, but will have to read again. My first impression is that you are very deep, have a ton of potential as a poet. But can't do you justice right now, have too much going on here at home, so will read again and give you a rating. I do hope you continue. Nice job

[E]

People and all their chosen faces
Unconsciously clipping their own wings,
Without a thought their action erases
All the hope they ever had
To keep the good from the bad
All goes on
All in All

stupendous lines there, my friend, by far my favourite stanza. you take a most excelent idea, one that has certainly graced most of our thoughts, and given it a worthy bit of poetry to balance upon. for a first bang at poetry, i'd say you did a rather good job ;)

cheers.

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

I love this. This idea is a similar feel to my own writing. I actually have a piece called All in All that I don't have posted on this sight. I really enjoyed reading this and I hope that you add some more writings soon. Keep me posted when you do if you want to.
Love All,
Mejasha

[All faded blue]

On first quick read, I really like this, but it has been a long day, and I truly believe this deserves some meditation to savor the full potential of meaning within the lines. If this is first attempt at serious poetry, I am looking forward to seeing more.