Simple, Properly Executed, Properly Rhymed,
I must say - This poem is way closer to you heart, You wrote this piece of work when you really loved someone. But never expressed it.
I must visit your page often to check out your writings :)
Over all Better work..
Keep rolling you personal experiences into black-white..
Kind Regards,
Vikrantsingh Parmar
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much! I appreciate such a helpful review.
This was a good write, Kyle. Very well written, I'm sure many of us can relate to it, it is difficult to be in love with someone when they don't know. I got lost in this, wonderful imagery.
Tender, little ode to the one who holds your heart.
In the world of writing, poetry doesn't necessarily have to be flowery and filled with metaphor, while metaphors are my bread and butter, I've realized that direct, literal lines are just as impressive... you have proved that here.
This was definitely a great write, K. :) I can definitely say I can relate to having a crush on someone who never seemed to know I was crushing on him, though, in the end I would up marrying that man. :) This was a great poem! :) Great job.
I enjoyed this very much, Paul. It's very relatable. Loving someone from a distance. Everyone has experienced that in one way or another. It has a great flow. Wonderful write. Thanks for sharing. :)
I write mostly short stories.
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