A First Kiss

Everyones fantasy....

Our first KISS
 

So we have known this for a time   a long time This innocence this pretending this need We only know each other innocently or do we? We act like it isn't in the air but it's all over the air We both try to pretend everything is OK that we don't really need this to happen Neither of us want to be the first to risk anything This need of ours is so mutual  but why? Why do we both have to pretend the giant pink elephant isn't in the room? Who has the most to lose?  who wants to make the first move? Who wants to take the risk to enjoy such pleasure? Who will it be?

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

i love this, i agree: this is very, relatable, beautiful poem:

"This innocence this pretending this need

We only know each other innocently or do we?

We act like it isn't in the air but it's all over the air"

- these lines say so much, written with eloquence and beauty, amazing! looking forward to reading more of your work. thank you for reviewing some of my writes, i truly appreciate it :)

[soliloquy]

Thank you so much from the heart....I really appreciate it.

[Becky C Strukamp]

Very relateable I most definitely agree! Your look into the intimate feelings between a man and a woman's emotional needs is exquisite! I love your take on life!

Hugs

[jkhatz]

Yep. I know that stupid, f*****g elephant all too well. Fear of destroying something near perfect keeps us from addressing it.

[soliloquy]

Amen. It sucks when things never get into 2nd gear!

[Jo March]

i love this, very childlike and innocent and beautifully written

[soliloquy]

Thank you dear.... You are too kind.

[That_Girl]

I love the changes you made and agree with Elizabetha, definitely some conflicting emotions during the experience. :)

[soliloquy]

Thanks hon. I'm glad you liked it.

[Baby Ricochet]

I made the first move. I"m kind of assertive like that.

[That_Girl]

Doesn't surprise me one bit.

[Chris]

A good capture...

[unknown]

I love this poem, and the effect that it causes in people. :)

[soliloquy]

What effect? :0)

[unknown]

It's like something of inquisitiveness. You have that wonder of what's going to happen on making that move. Will it make or break something. I felt that way with my first kiss. :)

[soliloquy]

I agree. what an uncomfortable yet amazing moment.

[unknown]

Truly it is. :) I love the feeling, yet dread it all at once. :)

[soliloquy]

After the initial discomfort of course....then its insane. :0)

[unknown]

It's always insane after that initial shock. :)

[soliloquy]

yes.....

:0)

[unknown]

I still remember mine. :) Quite the little experience. :)

[soliloquy]

You need to elaborate.

[unknown]

How so?

[soliloquy]

Was he older? younger? what was the setting? did you date for a while? was it outside or inside?

[unknown]

Well, he was older. I was 18, and (don't judge) he was 23. We had been friends for a little while, and I never knew that we felt that way til we were standing outside in the rain one day after I came home from work. I was having a hard day, and had just gotten done having another bullying moment, and it was taking its toll.... We were standing there under the stars, and I was talking to him, and he was just listening.... He listened well. And I began to tell him how no one seemed able to show me any affection besides himself, and he lifted my chin up with his fingers, and it happened with a sweet, almost seductive, slowness. Where time just seems to stop, and give you time to realize what's going to happen, but you don't stop it. It was my first, and it was shocking. Yet, amazing. :)

[soliloquy]

Sounds wonderful. :0)

[unknown]

It was. :)

[rnuff]

emotional wonderful read

[soliloquy]

Thank you! :0)

[That_Guy]

Very relatable which I enjoy in reading/writing.

Are the occasional capitalized words to emphasize them as you read it? if so I like the effect but I feel like there could be a better way to do it.

regardless I liked it and I look forward to reading more.

[soliloquy]

thank you...i just made some changes.....i appreciate the feedback.

[That_Guy]

anytime Mate