I wrote this after watching the movie "Dear John". I cried a ridiculous amount as I do in almost all movies. The first two lines came as somewhat of an epiphany and this is the result.
I don't really know that I like the title for this poem. I struggled with this poem and can't really decide if I like it. If you have any suggestions on the title or anything else I would love to hear them. Thanks!
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Ok, so the first thing that popped into my head after reading that "Dear john" inspired this, was the song "Set the fir to the third bar"! Hahah!
"I am done…I no longer fight" .. I think alot of people can relate to your poem Carlie, because it's real and very venerable, it almost feels like you've written it for every person out there who's endured the same. Just work abit on your rhyming scheme, there's some things you can fix abit! Not that it needs it or anything, perfection isn't always key in something like this. Mangled and broken is usually how someone feels. Great work!
I really like this one. I too am cursed with a mind that thinks too freely. On the rare occasion I have allowed my 'heart' to feel without rationalising, it has only lead to pain, sleepless nights, and feeling enslaved.
I love the subject of your poem, I can really relate.
Your sentences are really powerful and as I read them I go straight into the heart of the subject (no pun intended).
I agree with José, this would definitely gain in being expanded.
Who/what is forcing its way ? Why ? Why to the point that you can't fight anymore ?
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