A Birds Nest

This is a poem that expresses my want to leave. To be something I'm not. To escape. Its used in a weird format. It goes 1-2-3-4-5-6-5-4-3-2-1 in syllables.

Day

By day

I see lives

Never ending

Always starting here

Going away from me,

Waiting for my chance

To be  out there

Forever

Always

Free

Author's Note

I will say that I am not very proud of this. But I do think that it resembles me most. Please enjoy my writing.

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

This is an amazing accomplishment for a poem. I didn't notice it until after I read it through two times that the poem structure is shaped like a diamond which is highly original. And it's also very hard to convey your words and thoughts into just right for the diamond. You did well on this. I really do mean what I say, lol. The flow is nice and easy. Like raindrops flowing in rhythm.

I really did like this poem; regardless to if you're not proud of it. :3 Continue writing greatly.

[Lunar Lightning]

Not bad, I think this is one of your better poetry peices. I like the basic structure, but I think you should rethink the wording so that the diomond is held more securely in its shape, I think it would just add to the poem so muc h more.

Luna

[A.M. Everlasting]

I'm not one for free form prose, usually, unless it makes me sad or makes me think. This one did a mixture of both, speaking to my own desires. I think this poem is very good, and you should be proud of it. But then again, to each their own...

[Lucia]

ohhh like the syllable pattern thingy (I might have to try writing like this) lol
Wow! I'm just reviewing all your stuff today...ahhh...I should be studying...
hmmm...why are you not proud? Always be proud of your work, especially when you have tried your best!
and While I don't know you personally, you seemed to have focused on your main contemporary emotion
and expressed it thoroughly. Great job~ =]

[Flo]

thats quite a good poem, keep it up, you'll do better and greater pieces ^-^
-Flo