Lying in the Darkness

When depression takes over.

The dark sky was swallowing me whole; not even the crickets were there to comfort me. The supposedly beautiful flowers only creeped in the the night as they brushed and swayed against my frozen skin and gave me chills in a failing attempt to caress me with the cold damp wind. Not a sound was to be heard and the shear blackness of the hills surrounding me were enough to make me feel as if I was in a bowl with not a soul to be found. I was not fond of bats but what I would've given to hear the rapid flutter of wings. Silence is not golden, it is fear. Not even the fluorescent moon could shine bright enough to lead me out of this companionless field of nothingness.

THE END

Author's Note

I wrote this in english class; it's nothing special and really short.

Reviews

[Mother_Yolk]

Wow. Lively... I'm going to agree with K.L Starr and say that the switch from "me-to-you" was a tad confusing. But I'm also going to disagree by saying that this is in fact a splendid "story"! My definition of a good story is a narrative meant to amuse and interest... deliver an emotion of some sort... and this "story" did exactly that to me. It was unease. Not every single prose and verse in the world has to have a plot. It can have a theme to it. This 'story' is really saying "Silence is fear" and it proceeds to spill out descriptions to add to this theme and bring it to life. So this was not just a plot-less story to me... It was quite enjoyable. Not everything you read has to have a plot to follow. Sometimes a nice flow of descriptions and eerie/nice vibes can make a reader enjoy it.

"I was not fond of bats, but what I would've given to hear the rapid flutter of wings..." Awesome! My favorite line here.

[K.L. Starr]

"Not a sound was to be heard and the shear blackness of the hills surrounding me were enough to make you feel as if you were in a bowl with not a soul to be found."
You switch from me to you, which was kind of confusing.
Also, I don't really understand how this is a story as much as a description of a scene. A story requires some sort of plot.

[Sofia Brun]

Thank you. Though a bit harsh, this was very helpful. I'll be sure to edit it right away.