Summer Days

just a little something :)

Soft footprints on the beach

Fading from the nearing tide

Frothing waves pound the shore

The surf engulfs my feet

Rhythmic ripples

Sing softly as we walk

In the crook of your shoulder

My head did lie

Peaceful and calm

Hands entwined

Author's Note

review please

Reviews

[lee von cleef]

Bliss with a lot of love................

[C.C. Marx]

Why thank you for the kind review!!

[Chris]

A nice static mindpic of a warm and soft moment. Like the after description we might make of a photo we saw...

But it feels very static, unmoving, jumbled thought impressions... perhaps making it more flowing by adding personal touches, timing, and a sense of paced but active word tones?

[C.C. Marx]

Thanks for your kind words and your feedback is much appreciated

[TheJordBaker]

I love this, a beautiful, poetic moment captured perfectly by words. Particularly early on I felt in place of the narrator standing on the beach soaking the moment in. Well done :)

[C.C. Marx]

I appreciate you taking the time to review it :)

[Kanishk Upadhyaya]

This was filled with the environment of love and how surroundings acknowledge its presence. Amazing!!

[C.C. Marx]

Thank you very much for the review

[Sam Gregory]

Nice, I love beaches. Very chilled sorta feel to it, I feel the first line coulda been a but more like "golden beach" or something, I feel just sayin beach isn't enough. Still overall good work :) Keep it up

[C.C. Marx]

Always criticizing me, aren't we?? Never satisfied? Im just kidding, I appreciate all the feedback, thanks for that and for the review

[Sam Gregory]

I think u should write it again :P Nah am joking. No problem :)

[C.C. Marx]

Well maybe I will

[Sam Gregory]

Noooo doont! :(

[C.C. Marx]

I'm just joking to lazy for that

[Sam Gregory]

I know u were lolol

[C.C. Marx]

Or maybe I will rewrite it completely

[Sam Gregory]

Well, that'd be most unfortunate

[C.C. Marx]

I can't write now, too much emotional s**t to deal with

[Sam Gregory]

It doesn't need re-writing :) But, my advice about the emotional s**t is, you might aswell vent it out bein a poet

[C.C. Marx]

I might try that later I'm too busy trying to be alone

[CookieDough]

This was a nice one!

[C.C. Marx]

Thanks for reviewing!!

[CookieDough]

No problem!

[SyberRose]

A sweet moment you described...enjoyed your words.
~SyberRose

[C.C. Marx]

Thank you very much for the review!! Glad u enjoyed it :)

[Frieda P]

I just want to tuck this one in my pocket and take it with me all day, it's like a big beachy smile that makes me feel all warm and gooey. Love it!

[C.C. Marx]

Aww thank u!! I mean really though who doesn't love summer?!?! Ps I get on and there's and I have 25 new review comments all from noodles page

[Frieda P]

I noticed last night....I gave up on that one ;-)

My pleasure...can you fit summer in your pocket by the way?

[C.C. Marx]

Not sure but I wish, especially in those cold winter days and long school weeks

[Frieda P]

I thought you had exams today...

[C.C. Marx]

Not final exams but I have a math test that counts for a significant portion of my grade so like an exam

[Frieda P]

good luck with that, math gives me the heebie jeebies

[C.C. Marx]

Same if I run out of the room screaming, no one should be surprised....happy pi day!!!!! ;)

[Admiral Kirk]

Awwww, sweeeeet!!! :D lol we can do this sort of thing in January sometimes... lol :P The imagery in this poem is phenomenal... :D

[C.C. Marx]

haha that makes me jealous because sadly I cannot, thank you very much!!!

[Admiral Kirk]

lol well, as a consequence, we don't get any snow ever. :P You're welcome! :D

[C.C. Marx]

ahhh snows overrated rather be warm and tan!!

[Admiral Kirk]

lol true... I've seen snow twice! DID YOU KNOW IT FALLS FROM THE SKY TOO?! I WAS LIKE OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[C.C. Marx]

Haha im aware, but honestly once you've had to walk barefoot up a hill of snow you no longer like it or getting it shoved down your back.....its cruel and unusual punishment

[Admiral Kirk]

Ahhh... Now, that makes sense... That would kill the mood, wouldn't it?

[C.C. Marx]

yes yes it would also two words: yellow snow

[Admiral Kirk]

Mm, I see... I saw some of that... my dad told me not to eat it... xD

[C.C. Marx]

smart man he is lol Ive been told that too

[Admiral Kirk]

lol :P It's a joke we have around these parts, "Don't eat the yellow snow". Except it never snows. A useless joke, but a joke nonetheless. :P

[C.C. Marx]

I think that is ment for the people around these parts though sadly my dog doesn't quite understand that saying

[Admiral Kirk]

Ah, dogs are strange...

[C.C. Marx]

mine is especially stupid I wonder sometimes...she ran into a glass door the other day

[Admiral Kirk]

Hmm... So did I! :D

[Lover Of Words]

Short but sweet nice job!

[C.C. Marx]

Thanks for reviewing Kelsey!!

[Lover Of Words]

My pleasure