A mean friend

About a girl who has a friend who wants revenge on her

May Walker looked at the silver guillotine in her hands and felt stable.

She walked over to the window and reflected on her pretty surroundings. She had always loved beautiful Plymouth with its tart, tired trees. It was a place that encouraged her tendency to feel stable.

Then she saw something in the distance, or rather someone. It was the figure of Charity Trescothik. Charity was a brave giant with sticky toenails and ginger arms.

May gulped. She glanced at her own reflection. She was a brave, admirable, port drinker with handsome toenails and short arms. Her friends saw her as a homely, healthy hero. Once, she had even jumped into a river and saved a beautiful baby bird.

But not even a brave person who had once jumped into a river and saved a beautiful baby bird, was prepared for what Charity had in store today.

The snow flurried like gyrating ostriches, making May puzzled.

As May stepped outside and Charity came closer, she could see the loopy glint in her eye.

Charity glared with all the wrath of 1888 cold-blooded dripping dogs. She said, in hushed tones, "I hate you and I want revenge."

May looked back, even more puzzled and still fingering the silver guillotine. "Charity, hUGS FOR DAYS," she replied.

They looked at each other with cross feelings, like two mushy, mutated maggots sleeping at a very tight-fisted Halloween party, which had orchestral music playing in the background and two modest uncles chatting to the beat.

Suddenly, Charity lunged forward and tried to punch May in the face. Quickly, May grabbed the silver guillotine and brought it down on Charity's skull.

Charity's sticky toenails trembled and her ginger arms wobbled. She looked healthy, her emotions raw like a roasted, rotten ruler.

Then she let out an agonising groan and collapsed onto the ground. Moments later Charity Trescothik was dead.

May Walker went back inside and made herself a nice glass of port.

THE END 

Author's Note

what do you think?

Reviews

[Miss Eve]

I really liked it. I like how May casually walks back inside after killing Charity. I think the "I hate you and I want revenge" is a little cliche though, I would try something different. I like how you describe everything/everyone in the story. You might want to dial it back a bit though. For example, the baby bird only plays as an example and doesn't really need a description.

[Shannon]

Thanks for the opinion Eve plus I hope you are enjoying it so far.what I'm doing is post the chapter's get opinions then do what they think and put it into one story.

[Miss Eve]

Oh, that's a really good idea! I love your work and how independent it always is!