road to victory

road to victory

A Poem by erika

Road to victory.


        There is a
cry for Justice
at the tip
of my  ear
hearing me.

There is a
Scrapbook in
my  memory
remembering me.

This is a
Ring of freedom
In my stride
Congrating  me

This is a
Vision of a equal world
In my eyes
Leading me

This  is a
Joy after a
Hard fought battle
In my heart
Honoring me

© 2014 erika


Author's Note

erika
Is there any thing I can change?

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yes, I would change congrating to congratulating me,, other than that, I think you expressed your poem
in a dignified manner and it is excellent!! thanks for sharing it with me♥

Posted 10 Years Ago


This poem reminded me of one of my favorite songs I used to listen to when I was a child. They don't necessarily carry the same message, but similarities between the words brought it to mind. http://youtu.be/HTvr79Oe5w8

Anyway, I loved this. I felt to me like an uphill battle finally coming to a victorious end. The only thing I would possibly change is the word "congrating" into something like congratulating or "admiring". Beautiful work.



Posted 10 Years Ago



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erika
erika

berkeley, CA



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