I Can't

Poem directed towards someone who has deeply hurt me

I can't see the light at the end of the tunnel,

I can't find my way out,

I’m lost and confused,

Beaten and bruised,

Nowhere to run and hide,

No way to disguise the pain,

You look at me and maybe you see the “persona of perfection”

But I want you to see that I am just like you,

I don’t have a perfect life and don’t want to,

And how the struggles I endure,

Are like a cure,

They mend my wounds,

And as I sit and stare at the moon,

I think about the past,

And wonder why my happiness doesn't last,

I hold on to this hope,

That things will get better,

And I write this letter,

About my life

Remembering the words you said,

And how they cut like a knife,

And all the time I’ve spent,

Makes me hell-bent,

To find a way to forget the troubles,

And how you've bursted all my bubbles,

Making me believe there is no hope,

And I try to break this rope you have wrapped around me,

I would love to make you see the wrong you have done,

How you’re like a loaded gun,

You make me believe that I’ve got the key,

And I give you applause

For all the pain you have caused.

 

Reviews

[Natalie Dieudonne]

Wow! Where do I begin. I feel like this was written for me and from one writer to another thank you for this. You've managed to express so perfectly in words what I feel.

"I would love to make you see the wrong you've done, how you're like a loaded gun." Such a perfect line. Please keep writing.

[Matthew Walters]

Very interesting, it is very moving and I enjoy you wrote it all in rhyme.

[A. Amos]

Simply amazing write, looking forward to read you more...

[Erik Daniel]

Beautiful poem! Great job!

[timthy]

tried to friend you on FB...could not find ya. please friend me...I cant wait to hear more of your work!!! I found a bunch of Alyssa palmers in red sweaters. just not the one I thought was you. Cant find me ...timothy b. woodfin..just look for the poets loft on fb...

[timthy]

once again I am left astonished. your ability to make the reader feel your emotions is a true gift. As you read some of my works you will see that you and I have in retrospect , perhaps have dealt with things in the same way. If we did not pen our true emotions and/or thoughts...we would both be crazy...am I correct? Once again, great piece, and keep up the GREAT work!!!

[Linda alexander]

And I try to break this rope you have wrapped around me,
I would love to make you see the wrong you have done,
great write, pain is expressed clearly, well transferred to the reader in same intensity

[smurfette224]

who can tell me how to change my profile picture?