True love

True love

A Poem by smurfett

I love you he said, as he patted my head
It's been a long day, you coming to bed?

Such is the life of a common law wife
The tension at times you could cut with a knife.

Where once love did live, my heart I would give
To watch memories fall out through a bottomless sieve.

I'll speak not a peep, but go quickly to sleep
For when morning time comes, It's me he will keep.

© 2013 smurfett


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Not sure if the love u write about is true, but enjoyed the rhyme scheme ... Thanks for sharing

Posted 10 Years Ago


wow girl i love your style of writing, simple yet beautiful and very direct. Just loved it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

smurfett

10 Years Ago

I look forward to reading your work....we are all learners.....all through life...
A. Amos

10 Years Ago

Looking forward for your reviews
A. Amos

10 Years Ago

Thank you and I look forward for your guidance and reviews. Thank you very much
What is amazing about this poem is the flow. It tells a good story but the flow pulls you along to the end. Great job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

smurfett

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the read and review Eddie. I'm glad you enjoyed it
Great flow and rhyme to this well written poem! I enjoyed reading it very much!

:) Julie

Posted 11 Years Ago


To each his own and to us what work best I guess in relationships...Bravo..........

Posted 11 Years Ago


smurfett

11 Years Ago

True...although it's not my situation...just something that came to me..thank you sami
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

I understand...You are welcome...:)..........
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

:).......................
Nice use of words in the poem of love. I like the simple flow of thoughts leading to a very good ending. Thank you for reading the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

smurfett

11 Years Ago

Thank you coyote...
Life is full of complications. Good rhymes

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

smurfett

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the read poet.
I've never been in a common law marriage but I imagine there must always be some feeling of incompleteness or hmm, not sure of the word I'm looking for but anyway, I know this not a good review but I did like the poem and can see your feelings.

Posted 11 Years Ago


smurfett

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading

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smurfett
smurfett

Lutz, FL



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I am so moved by the vast differences in people and what inspires them to put pen to paper. Everyone has a story to tell. I hope my words can please and inspire those around me as well... more..

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