Sadness

You're lost you don't know where to turn

You feel all hope is gone.

What once had brought you happiness

Disappeared just like the dawn.

Struggling through your daily life

You want them all to see

Your painted smile, your cheap facade

There's nothing wrong with me.

Life it seems has lost its thrill

Not much enjoyment left.

The sparkle in your eyes is gone

A slow and painful death.

You try to capture rainbows

And stuff them deep inside.

But somehow once they reach the soul

The colors start to die.

Black's the only color now

That lives within your soul.

Where once your heart was full of love

Is now an empty hole.

If I could have but just one wish

You know what that would be?

To let my heart know love again

And just let me be me.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"Life it seems has lost its thrill

Not much enjoyment left.

The sparkle in your eyes is gone

A slow and painful death.




You try to capture rainbows

And stuff them deep inside."
You poetry is defined by beauty and great skill...I really like this write...:)

[smurfett]

Thank you poet. I appreciate your criticism. I also have read a couple of yours and you have a beautiful talent and way with words. I can't wait to read more!!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[A. Amos]

Such a powerful subject! Your writing is so magnificently constructed.

[smurfett]

Thank you Noel. Kind reviews from you mean a lot. Thank you for your time.

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome my friend

[Debbie_Philly]

I Love love love this piece I wish I wrote it.... you have captured my moods sometimes right here... great job !! ;)

[smurfett]

Thank you Debbie. Sometimes I'm afraid to write where my emotions take me at the time. People like to thin Dear God...this girl needs serious help! lol. Maybe at times, they're right. But I know we all feel this way at times. It's part of being human in a very unforgiving world . Thank you for your comments!!

[Debbie_Philly]

Oh your welcome and listen most of the time I'm writing out my emotions... its cathartic ... its a great piece.... its called confessional poetry... Anne Sexton and Sylvia Plath wrote that way... you in good company !! :)

[smurfett]

Thank you so much! Your words mean so much to me.

[Chris]

So many find their heart's desire and just have to change it til it no longer is who they were... and then the love is gone away. What is left in the growing dawn after the night's sweet dream has went its way?

Sigh.

[smurfett]

Well put Chris!!! Thank you!

[Wolfwind]

A beautiful flow of ink, whose river runs with the pain of heartache and oppression. That's what I see in your woven lines here on the page. If only life's emotions could be healed with the throw of a toggle switch. Now that would be the miracle cure for sure. Especially fun on those nights when other temptations hover around like ghosts waiting for a body.

Very nicely crafted!
Aaron

[smurfett]

Nicely said Aaron! Thank you....Yes, those fun nights can be torturous!!! lol Have a great night my friend
Tina

[Brandon S. Whitten]

An excellent read and splendid write capturing an emotion I tried to escape for a long time. After all I am a Wednesday's child.

[smurfett]

Brandon, thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Sometimes I find capturing an emotion is therapeutic and sometimes it's just saddening. Happier things coming!! Thank you friend

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Indeed they are. You are welcome.

[Kris]

This is a beautiful & powerful write. I loved every line, which dripped with sadness, and every word which portrayed pain. Masterfully written, thanks for sharing!

[smurfett]

Thank you for your words of inspiration Chrissy.