Smiles and Goodbyes

Smiles and Goodbyes

A Poem by Joe Butler

We think with our dicks not with our heads,
Wake up with sore heads in strange beds,

Your lipstick stains my dreams,
When I sleep to find you again,
Smiles and goodbyes hit the heart of me,
Sword cuts ink scars more than this pen,

Furthermore it seems we never were,
How can you break up the broken,
Fairly odd tales tell the signs of her,
Emotions thrown around like tokens,

Conversations mix contemplations now,
Time sucked by empty words expressed,
Waves of awkward silence across the bow,
Going through the motionlessness.

© 2014 Joe Butler


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You have really nice sound and flow. I would only suggest being more intentional with word choice. Some of these words seem to have only been picked because they rhymed (such as tokens). If it wasn't a rhyming poem, would you still have picked that word? Is that really what you meant, or was it just convenient?

Overall, very nice though :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Joe Butler

10 Years Ago

Yes you are right sometimes I look for the rhyme rather than what I want the next line to be, thanks.. read more



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You have really nice sound and flow. I would only suggest being more intentional with word choice. Some of these words seem to have only been picked because they rhymed (such as tokens). If it wasn't a rhyming poem, would you still have picked that word? Is that really what you meant, or was it just convenient?

Overall, very nice though :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Joe Butler

10 Years Ago

Yes you are right sometimes I look for the rhyme rather than what I want the next line to be, thanks.. read more

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Added on September 6, 2014
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Joe Butler
Joe Butler

Bournemouth, Dorset, United Kingdom



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I'm a 24 year old guy living in Bournemouth, England. I have a great passion for writing poetry and song lyrics and would love some opinions on some of my works. I mostly write off the cuff at random .. more..

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