Listen

A poem

Listen

 

Listen to my breathing

Listen closely

Each is quiet and complete

Like a breeze

Not without a rhythm

 

Listen to my veins

It is not throbbing

It is rich in blood

But never splurges richness

Not like you, the millionaire

 

Listen to my heart and its beats

It contracts in contentment

Revels in meditation

Seeks orgasm in love

Not like you, the prostitute!!

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

That was very beautifully penned. The imagery in this piece was very striking and poignant. Great work here :)

[Rick Puetter]

Dear JENY,

Oh, Wow. Someone is in trouble here, not held in much respect. I like the juxtaposition of your inner peace and gentle way with that of the "other".

Nicely done.

Very best regards,

Rick

[Jibey]

A charming composition, with a mesage that rings true...

Hope you wil come back!

[Bubo]

Such contrast in your words ~ you are happy in your skin, while other's might well seek riches and pleasure.......a lot to think about in your words.Clearly written and beautifully deep.

[Shalini Dinesh]

Very nice poem with good endings in each stanza...

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[An owl on the moon]

There are such revelations here.. contrasts and contemplations.. the breathing voice... the message of the heart... Made me think deeply of existence.. of what i am.. what others see in me.. Deeply moving imagery.

[Sweets]

It's beautiful how you repeat the lines several times!
Wonderful work!

[Black Cat Fever]

Not the prostitute or the millionaire, often two who are often viewed in the negative so if your the opposite that means to me your rich in life and love, unlike they. Nicely done.