NEVER

a poem

NEVER

 

Never touch

Where I never touched

A touch is enough

To break open the whole pain

 

Never kiss

Where I never kissed

A brush of lips is enough

To break open the whole passion

 

Never smile

When I never smiled

A smile is enough

To fan the fire of my longings..

 

Never smell

What I never smelled

A smell is enough

To wake up the animal in me

 

Never call

When I never called

Your voice is enough

To crumble the walls of my inhibitions

 

Never come

When I never came in front of you

A sight is enough

To break my mind into pieces

Pieces of unfulfilled hopes.

Reviews

[Tracie D'Angelo]

Oh wow! I really love this! I don't know if I'm right, but I feel this is about restrained love. Kinda like, don't give me a reason to love you. Love it!!

[Richard Williams]

A clever poem exploring the aspects of never, with fine combinations like, "A brush of lips is enough/To break open the whole passion." The metaphor of pieces is excellent.

[Nautili]

nice poem, jeny, filled with suppressed longing. Good work.

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem my writer friend. I like the feel of a old desire and memories in the poem. A hint of regret and need I feel inside the strong words. A very good ending to a excellent poem. Sometime we must hold on to the disappointments. That is all we have left.
Coyote

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Great write..!!

[Sweets]

This is so creative!
I loved the ending!
"To break my mind into pieces
Pieces of unfulfilled hopes."
This is absolutely wonderful :)
Great work!

[Dream Weaver]

Sadly beautiful, sometimes never is not forever..

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Painful, and easy to read. Raw emotion and slight of hand with your wording, well done!

[Livenrite]

Like like like! there's nothing like good repetition in a poem:) thanks for sharing!

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the repetition is strong..songlike..a strong sense of knowing