SELF IMAGE

A Poem by JENY

A poem

SELF IMAGE

Cant you see me?

I am very much clear and perfect..

You look into this mirror

With the same eyes

That I look into..

You can see me..

Never look at my face

If you want to see me..

Look into this mirror in my hand

I cant see myself without this mirror

In my hand..

Then how can you see me..

Without this mirror??

You dunderhead

Stop looking at me….

Look at my reflection.

I feel ashamed.

© 2010 JENY

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Tracie D'Angelo

I think I can understand the concept behind this poem, but I don't think it clearly shines through the words. I got a bit confused by the 3rd stanza.

Posted 12 Years Ago

SoLongAndThanksForAllTh..

This poem is an intriguing if sometimes confusing investigation into how we see ourselves.

Thematically you've picked a very interesting subject for the poem. It develops nicely as you suggest that perhaps to understand someone you need to understand how they see themselves. However, after this I became a little confused as to what the message is. Perhaps I'm the "dunderhead"? I think what might be creating some of this uncertainty is the mass of ellipses: seven in seventeen lines is quite a few! The effect of this is that when I read the poem the images keep fading away and as this builds up I become more and more convinced there will be no resolution. Perhaps this is one of those occasions where less is more?

On the whole I think you've got something here but I'm not sure if the execution is doing your subject justice.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Coyote Poetry

"Look into this mirror in my hand
I cant see myself without this mirror
In my hand.."
Mirrors can trick you. Real value of a person is what you do and how you live. I like this poem. Open the doors to many good questions. A excellent poem.
Coyote