IF I WERE TO DIE TOMORROW

A poem

IF I WERE TO DIE TOMORROW

 

If I were to die tomorrow

This poem will sing aloud

That I had loved him

 

If I were to die tomorrow

Words of this poem

Will march like an army

To tell him that

I was honest in my love

 

If I were to die tomorrow

This poem will rhyme

Dove…. love….. dove.. love…

Reminding the dove like purity

Of my love for him

 

If I were to die tomorrow

This poem will collect 

New words and images

And rehash its attire..

Every now and then..

To let him know..

That my death can not kill

My love for him

 

 

 

Reviews

[SoLongAndThanksForAllTh..]

This poem proves that you don’t need to dig through a dictionary and write reams of gushing, flowing verse to describe powerful emotions.

The strength of this piece lies in its simplicity. There’s even a cute piece of self-referencing here when the narrator acknowledges that what she has is unadulterated, “this poem will rhyme dove.. love... dove... love”. The simplest of schemes but one she has eschewed in the poem in front of us.

There’s good use of a repeated theme here with each stanza beginning, “If I were to die tomorrow” which provides some structure in the absence of a rhyme scheme. It might have been nice to have some more of a rhythm to the poem though as the final stanza seems to get a little lost in itself and the cluster of ellipses.

Overall the effect of the poem is one of a very passionate love which the narrator seems to be at pains to make very clear to her beloved. Perhaps he does not recognise the intensity of her feelings of perhaps he just doesn’t say it? Either way this poem shouts her love to him!

[Undying Glory]

wow what a deep and profound piece of writing, this was very sweet work here!! i sure enjoyed this! love can be so painful sometimes but this proved how deep and true love can be!

"If I were to die tomorrow
This poem will collect
New words and images
And rehash its attire..
Every now and then..
To let him know..
That my death can not kill
My love for him"
good work!!

[the_stoic]

reeling under similar circumstances i know that love surpasses and engulfs the greatest of hates .. even though he has left you that wont stop you from loving him. that's unconditional love but it's painful too .. i just wonder if even death will make them wonder and ponder over what we had to go through ! i sadly feel it wont.. raw emotions dear jeny .. keep writing

[StacyPerry]

There is no boundary between love and anything else within any life time. Very nice write

[joe shmo]

beautiful poem!

[Livenrite]

wow! no words! very well written and a pleasure to read:) thanks for sharing!

[Coyote Poetry]

A positive and beautiful poem. Love will stay with us forever. The person may leave us. But the memories will allow us to swim in the good times. I like the language you used. Made the point strong in the words. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Nothing ever can kill love..love is the answer to all questions :)

[Bette]

very sweet.

[The Analog Kid]

I like this a lot. Last two lines are really something special Jeny:)