KEEP QUIET

wrote it for a contest

KEEP QUIET

 

Love talks aloud..

She tried to hush it

It banged against the walls

Of her heart that throbbed in

An adventurous journey

With a libido not known

To her before…

 

It jumped out …

This noisy love..

That she tried to squelch

 

It leaked out…

This naughty love

Through the chinks…

In smiles of her eyes..

In the choices of her words

In the blushes of her cheek

 

They said “she is in love”

She said NO..

There is no NO

In the NO of a woman

They were stubborn as a stone

They waited…

 

She said..YES

“I am in love” YES

They left her

They lost interest in her

And her love..

Now she is left alone

With her love

 

Keep quiet..

Let her love.

 

Reviews

[The Analog Kid]

Do not question the love of a woman. Sometimes it must remain a mystery. It can also pay homage to understood love between two people that should remain as such. Very nice, Jeny!

[the_stoic]

i don't know what to make of your write dear ! is it that a woman eventually lets the denial go away ? or is it that as soon she acknowledges her love it goes away .. the opening stanza quite aptly presents the tough task of hiding one's love . keep writing

[Dinesh Sairam]

There are only two thing is the world which we can't categorize for having become as 'cliches' - One is love and the other is the feeling that comes when love leaves a vacuum (It's interesting that English doesn't have a word for that, strange too!).

And this is about the latter. Well said. It kinda reminds me of a poem I wrote in my mother tongue, but it wasn't about love- It was in general. Anyways, enjoyed it and great to read your works after long.

Keep writing.

[Ruth]

No is a word that holds no place here lol
A beautiful poem love, love in a unique manner, wonderfully voiced
xx

[StacyPerry]

Powerful in so many ways.....

[Dream Weaver]

I love the imagination you have, every word describes the
next with such emotive exhilaration...Now I'll keep quiet ;-)

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wonderful metaphors ...

[Coyote Poetry]

Woman have there ways. Few will understand the emotion of a woman. I like this poem. The emotion of love can dance around til the woman decide her destiny and need. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Alice_In_WhateverLand]

OMGOSH, i f@#$%ng loved this!!!!!!!!!!

* Claps hands*

[Angel Veselinov]

Amazing Piece really loved it :) Good story too with an unique end which makes you think more than twice about what really happened was it good or bad for the character :)