KEEP QUIET

wrote it for a contest

KEEP QUIET

 

Love talks aloud..

She tried to hush it

It banged against the walls

Of her heart that throbbed in

An adventurous journey

With a libido not known

To her before…

 

It jumped out …

This noisy love..

That she tried to squelch

 

It leaked out…

This naughty love

Through the chinks…

In smiles of her eyes..

In the choices of her words

In the blushes of her cheek

 

They said “she is in love”

She said NO..

There is no NO

In the NO of a woman

They were stubborn as a stone

They waited…

 

She said..YES

“I am in love” YES

They left her

They lost interest in her

And her love..

Now she is left alone

With her love

 

Keep quiet..

Let her love.

 

Reviews

[A.Lee]

This is good. I loved the second to last stanza.

She said..YES
“I am in love” YES
They left her
They lost interest in her
And her love..
Now she is left alone
With her love

This can be interpreted in so many different ways. Very nice work.

[Daniel Gardner]

Love the rhyming scheme you used here. Love the last stanza. The entire poem reads smoothly. Great job.

[Holly O'Brien]

hmmm....this makes me feel something but I can't quite put my finger on it. But this really brings to mind someone who is not searching for love but like all human beings they must embrace it anyway in order to find peace with themselves. Good write :)

[Huggy Bear]

I love it. Very beautiful written.

[dovetailer]

How incessantly our love
demands its due
it pesters...pokes
and gives no peace
it fills us to the brim
and beyond
make us lie...deny
it to its face
but like untimely birth
it grows and grows
'til all can see
the lie "I know not Love"
that graced our lips
but once our lips give birth to love
the feeling's free
and never free to be unsaid...
dependent on
our nurturing

I loved your thoughts...it is so true...we cannot hide the things that make us burn...

[Tracie D'Angelo]

First of all, I really liked it. I think it's one of those poems that mean something different to everyone who reads it. I read it as a forbidden love. A love that the woman is trying to deny. I'd be interested in knowing where your thoughts were going while you were writing this.

[Richard Williams]

Quite imaginative, you've given love a life of its own. Good job.

[Bette]

well done

[joe shmo]

pretty yep us women should be treated like gems instead of dust. :)

[Shante Payne]

Your words here hold an honesty to it that just can't be touched. Women constantly feel that they fall in love wheter that's in the heat of the moment or out of true desire and feelings. It is always painful when we're left alone after professing our love...so yes, keep quiet....I love this, a favorite.